Slowly Fading - Comments

@ Astronaut9
Awh gosh thank you so much! Your comment has made my day <3

The THEME though! The theme is absolutely amazing. The colors and the pictures and the breaks in the middle of chapters just make it look so professional and fantastic. The story itself is amazing too and easy to picture and it's just great. You should continue this story!

It definitely has potential to be an amazing story. I like it so far.

Lucky me--I found this wonderful gem through Comment Swap, and I'm so glad I did! You have such a genuine, natural flow in your writing, and I love that your characters avoid many of the cliches and pitfalls of "evil, selfish mother/misunderstood daughter." They have depth, and despite their differences, a connection remains that binds them as a family. You write them with the true author's voice--objectivity tempered by human compassion. Your descriptions are masterfully handled as well, in that you provide lots of delicious details--sights, sounds, motion--but you deftly avoid getting bogged down in minutia. And I agree with the last commenter that your balance of dialogue and description is very good, but I have to say that I see it developing into more than the typical skater girl/band member story, simply because of the maturity you've brought to the table. I will be following and enjoying this story, and thank you so much for sharing!

I think your writing for this is wonderful. You do a great job with varying your sentence structure, and I think there's a perfect balance between dialogue and description. I think the content of the story is good, but I think it could be a little less cliche, if that makes sense? Right now it just seems like the typical skater girl meets band member and I'd like to see you change that up in later chapters so it doesn't fall into the same pattern as most stories like this. Other than that, I think you did a great job!

i love this! (comment swap)

Comment swap!
I don't really like Bullet or A7X but I actually found this quite interesting, it's a shame there's only one part so far! I'd be interested to know if you continue this (as I'm not sure how long it's been inactive for).

Comment swap:
i love the relationship between Abigail and her mother it's obviously very complex. At first it seemed as though they just didn't get on but by the end of the chapter you find that it's just her mothers way of protecting her from her own mistakes. i love how Abigail isn't looking to be perfect but is happy to just be herself, i wish i was as strong as her
Avenged Sevenfold and BFMV are well amazing but i've never read a fanfic with them both in and i'm so excited to see where this goes. It's really good and your a great writer, i'll definitely be subscribing to this

I really love the way your story is going. Avenged Sevenfold and BFMV are my favorite bands, I love that you added them together. Abigail seems to be strong character, I love that she doesn't want perfection in her life. Update soon, please.

Like others... Comment swap brought me here... I really like your story so far. I'm not really into this type of stuff, but it was a great read!! :) It was easy to read, and I can't wait til you post more! :)

Comment swap brought me here, and I'm glad it did! I've never read a real person fanfiction, so this is pretty new. Abigail reminds me of how I was when I was 16, haha. I caught a few spelling and grammatical errors, but nothing too major; a quick read through should do the trick. :)

I really like your writing style, too. It's refreshing! This story seems to be off to a great start. Keep up the good work! :)

Comment swap brought me here, and I'm glad it did! I've never read a real person fanfiction, so this is pretty new. Abigail reminds me of how I was when I was 16, haha. I caught a few spelling and grammatical errors, but nothing too major; a quick read through should do the trick. :)

I really like your writing style, too. It's refreshing! This story seems to be off to a great start. Keep up the good work! :)

Okay, so comment swap brought me here. I'm not a part of the fandoms that this story is based around, but because there's only one chapter so far, I don't think it matters that much for the moment :)

I love your writing style! It's very clear and easy to follow with a distinct sense of personality concerning Abigail. I picked up on a couple of spelling/grammar mistakes, but nothing major. An extra read through would easily correct those :) Everything about this story is extremely promising and it has a lot of potential, I wish you well with it! Good luck!

This is very interesting!! I can totally relate to Abigail haha I'm the trouble maker in a mormon family (I'm a Punker haha) but you should seriously continue this story- it is interesting, because for me it is relatable. :) Keep it up!

I like this story a lot! There are a few errors, little things, but not a big deal. I can help with that if you'd like. :) I'm interested to see where this will go.