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The end is what hit my feels the hardest wow.

Firstly, I really like the layout. It's simple yet so beautiful, although the writing is a tad small for my liking. I really liked the plot, at the end when you wrote about him wanting to jump, that was a really good twist, I had never even thought about that being why he was there.. Carmen seems so fun, stealing a bike? Wild child. I really loved this, although I think I found two mistakes, you may have wanted them like this, I don't know.
''on the morning'' should that not be in the morning''?

''weren’t n his taste.'' there's a random n in there.
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The layout is wonderful; the simplicity and the French feel has me in love!

As I read the chapter, I notice many things I like about it. Such as the sweetness of how they meet, and how finding out names drags on instead of happening immediately. It's extremely lovely. (Irrelevant, but I'd like to invite you to check out the cross of St. Peter which made a hipster boom as anti-religious ahaha and can I also mention my love for the fact that you pointed out the presence of nicotine in e-cigs.) The death of her father was a very touchy point for me, but I love the depth it adds to her character. I might point out that near the end She looked vulnerably. would just be vulnerable. This reminds me of my friend Carmen and how she has helped me every day since my friend killed himself. Definitely was not expecting that ending, but oh was it nice. The whole thing seems so life-like. I'd definitely like to see more of this.