Chanson de l'Océan - Comments

Holy crap, only reading the first chapter, I adore this story. I love the lore and your writing is flawless! I don't have much else to say since it's only the first chapter, but I'm already excited for the rest!

Even with the very small amount that had been written on this, I can tell that I am going to enjoy it. It's awesome that you've decided to take this on as your NaNoWriMo project, and I can't wait to see where you take it. I love how you've depicted the mermaids; the way that mythology told of them - and I think that Seth's reaction was perfect. You are an excellent writer, and you more than live up to any expectations. Cannot wait to read more. Best wishes!

I love this story so much already. The tone of your writing really suits the whole atmosphere of your story so far; it's subtle and doesn't give much away and yet it's descriptive at the same time. I really like the way you started it off with the mythological tale. You really set it up well; the way no one really believed it was true and yet it had been spoken of for a very long time.

I really, really love how she's not your typical, romaticised mermaid; she's feral and wild and true to the original tales of the mythological creatures, and yet seems to hold a unique human-like quality about her as well. Seth's reaction to her was really great, and I like that you didn't just have him running off in the other direction. It says a lot about his character already that he feels the strong compulsion to help her, even though she's hissing and snarling at him, and I'm really intrigued by him already. I'm also really interested in learning more about your interpretation of mermaids, because you seem to have done it extremely well already and I'm sure that you've thought this out a lot!

Your writing is honestly flawless. I don't know how you could think my writing is great after reading this! You really have a way with words. It's so easy to read and sets up such great imagery and wowzers am I glad I started reading this. Crappy comment is probably crappy and inarticulate but I love this story very much and it has completely lived up to my expectations and oh you brilliant writer you.

Before I start, I would like to say that I love your layout so much. It's so simple, but it's easy on the eyes and elegant. It's calming and beautiful, and holds the feeling of the story so well.

The blood had turned the pool she lay in, pink and he could still see it still, the blood, rolling slowly from the wound. — There's nothing wrong with this sentence, I promise, other than a repeated word. I highlighted them. I've, unfortunately, done that (what writer hasn't?) so I figured you'd like if I pointed it out for you.

I...have no words for this, at all. It's magical. I love how well you've mixed fantasy into modern. Your word usage and sentence structure is absolutely fantastic. Apart from that repeated word, I didn't stumble, not once, reading all three chapters. Everything flowed so well and your imagery was just so amazing. I almost felt breathless reading this because it was so wonderful. I felt like a child again, to be honest. I was in awe as I read and I had a childlike curiosity to know more about this creature and the history behind her species because it's just a unique way to go about mermaids, as well as the boy. I wanted to keep reading and I wanted to know so much more. I was so disappointed that it ended at three chapters. I really hope you update this at some point soon.

I am so in love with your writing, it's ridiculous. I'm very happy that you asked me to check out a story. I can't believe I would have missed such a gem if you hadn't.

This is great!

This is wonderful. I love how it's written. I absolutely love the tale that you have in the first chapter. It's beautiful. I also love the tittle of the story. I can't wait to read more.

Nic, this is absolutely beautiful. It has this air of a folk tale, yet we have the modern world mixed in with it and it leaves such a wonderful imagery to it, soft and vibrant, blurred and hectic. It is a wonderful combination.

I loved the layout, too. I always love your layouts because they're very soft and calming, despite whatever turmoil the narration holds within it.

I shall subscribe to this story in hopes of reading more; it is very well written and has an interesting plot-line that mixes in reality with fantasy, so I'm hooked.

I caught up with the second chapter and it's still absolutely fantastic. The imagery is perfect, I could see ever single sentence almost like a movie frame, it was so descriptive. I love this story to pieces already.

First of all, Hi, I love this story I have absolutely no complaints or criticism only compliments;
Chapter 1// This was a nice start. It didn't bore me and I can't express the amount of creativity this chapter held. The story within a story was a very clever addition. You also have beautiful writing skills; simple but beautiful.

Chapter 2// /fangirl scream/ your words flowed together nicely in this chapter. The description of the mermaids tail and her voice as well as her injured state was amazing; instead of saying bluntly she was injured you described it through her voice, how it was “shallow” and how the water was pink. Good job with that ;) Oh and this one small simile of her eyes was my favorite: “Dark eyes like a storm.”

As for the layout I really like the creamy colors and banner, it's really pretty. You have yourself a new subscriber ~

Oh SA-NAP. A mermaid story!
Let me start off by saying how beaaauuutiful this layout is. I'm obsessed with it, really.
Your writing is so... magical

My favorite mythological creatures have always been mermaids so this is just like icing to me. Amaze balls I must say.
And your writing always gives me the good happy feels. You know what I'm sayin'

Is it possible to marry a story?
This is amazing love.
Absolutely stunning and the layout is breathtaking. I love it. <3

Crazy good. Just, ugghh, I'm so in love with your writing and this story is so amazing. I love mermaids, and I love your writing, so this is just an awesome combination. Mark my words, I'll be back. Just. I'm speechless. Can't wait for it to really get going.

Holy gorgeous layout.

It always makes me happy when I find stories of yours that I haven't commented on yet. Apparently there's a few, so that's exciting.

I love the worlds you create in your stories, like Danielle said. They're so creative and unique and amazing. They're all so different as well, which always amazes me. You have such a great talent, lovely girl.

I really like the plot of this. It's always interesting to read about cultures like the one you've created here, that have stories that they pass down through generations and crazy superstitions. I'm excited to see where you go with this!

Amazing job, as always!

What I admire about your stories, Nic, is that you create these crazy, descriptive stories out of nowhere. You create these worlds inside your stories that are absolutely amazing and I love the simple imagery you write to help the reader imagine them. It's like, I don't know how you have all these ideas up there but I love it. I'm not usually into these types of science fiction-ish stories, but I like yours.

I love the characters that you come up with, because they're all unique and different in their own right. They are all different and you actually write it that way rather than just telling us they're different.

This is great. I love the potential in this.