Wounds Heal (Scars Don't) - Comments

@ XTeamSammiX
Thank you so much!!

I'm working on it c: I'm trying to not be as repetitive.

Thank You again ^-^ Hope you enjoy the rest of the story!

I've subscribed to your story, because I think it has nice potential and I do want to see what happens between our two leading men, but I do have to give you some criticism. While you're story plot is good I find myself losing attention in the story from how the sentence structure is where almost every line starts with "I", it takes away form the story's imagery and makes it seem almost like a list. Just keep that in mind when your writing, because personally it was on of my bad habits I sit and try to make sure the first words hardly repeats, you could try using adverbs or prepositions. Also the paragraph aren't actually separated and it makes it a big chunk of words that can turn off a lot of readers. I hope you take this positively and I can't wait to read the next chapter.