Well I liked this, but I did spot some faults, and since you're a pretty new writer on here, I'll point them out so that you'll know for next time.
you could use, to describe a young There is no need for a comma here.
and hed been pushed You forgot to put in an apostrophe in he'd
No more cold.. Only warmth, You don't need to capitalize only here.
Also you need to separate your speech from the rest of the story. You haven't done that and also you could break this up into a paragraph or two. Anyway, over all I think this was quite good for a first try. I'd recommend getting a layout to use from Here. There are plenty to chose from. Good luck with future stories!
Well I liked this, but I did spot some faults, and since you're a pretty new writer on here, I'll point them out so that you'll know for next time.
you could use, to describe a young There is no need for a comma here.
and hed been pushed You forgot to put in an apostrophe in he'd
No more cold.. Only warmth, You don't need to capitalize only here.
Also you need to separate your speech from the rest of the story. You haven't done that and also you could break this up into a paragraph or two. Anyway, over all I think this was quite good for a first try. I'd recommend getting a layout to use from Here. There are plenty to chose from. Good luck with future stories!