Of You & Me - Comments

I thought second-person was perfect for this story. It really drew me in and made me feel the emotions of the narrator. It felt more personal and stood out as being unique and emotional. This was really great and I enjoyed it a lot!

I actually like how you used second person in this story. It worked rather well with your narrative. I like how you approached this story as well, because we could feel like we were apart of that relationship. I think you also used a lot of unique details to describe what happened between the two characters. I can relate to this story, and it pulled some emotions out of me.

All in all, I absolutely loved this. It was unique and I like the story you built with the characters, even though one of them was just simply talking to the other in this story. Well done, I really liked this!

Ahhh, I'm so excited that I found this story. I adore The Maine, and Fucked Up Kids is my favorite song from the new album.

I like how you used that one line as a basis for the entire story, and kind of tied the rest of the song in as well. I think second person worked really well with this story as well, it let you tell the story from a really interesting point of view and let us see what exactly was going on with your characters.

I loved the last line as well. And the title. It's always awesome when an author takes a line from their story and makes it the title, and then it doubled as a really awesome way to end the story so it worked really well.

I loved this, good job!