I feel like this reads like a bitter ex imagining the conversation they want to have with the person who broke their heart to shatter them and prove they're more successful now. Especially the part with her rubbing his face in how she's a lawyer married to a doctor and they own multiple homes and she's so rich and just way better than Drake who has absolutely nothing in life.
The only bit of it that I wasn't too keen on was that she's hanging onto this so passionately ten years later. I agree with him that she needed to let it go before this because she seems to have let it consume her so much so she let her hatred destroy her and kill him. If seeing her ex miserable is the best moment of her life, that's quite sad. She's gotten married, has a successful career, probably has loads of other accomplishments and seeing her ex about to kill himself is her greatest moment. She's quite a dark character in that respect and while I don't really like her, she is characterised quite well.
I did like your details of Liverpool at the beginning. It was a nice set up and it brought in the location without making a huge deal of it. Just casual local talk.
Overall, it was a strong, emotional piece. Very bleak and angst filled, but it reminds me of a kitchen sink drama in that sense, which, to me at least, adds to the setting since those were typically set in northern working class locations so Liverpool fits right in. A bit of British tradition there that I liked, even though that was probably totally unintentionally. Nice job.
The only bit of it that I wasn't too keen on was that she's hanging onto this so passionately ten years later. I agree with him that she needed to let it go before this because she seems to have let it consume her so much so she let her hatred destroy her and kill him. If seeing her ex miserable is the best moment of her life, that's quite sad. She's gotten married, has a successful career, probably has loads of other accomplishments and seeing her ex about to kill himself is her greatest moment. She's quite a dark character in that respect and while I don't really like her, she is characterised quite well.
I did like your details of Liverpool at the beginning. It was a nice set up and it brought in the location without making a huge deal of it. Just casual local talk.
Overall, it was a strong, emotional piece. Very bleak and angst filled, but it reminds me of a kitchen sink drama in that sense, which, to me at least, adds to the setting since those were typically set in northern working class locations so Liverpool fits right in. A bit of British tradition there that I liked, even though that was probably totally unintentionally. Nice job.