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    Ooooh fun fun.
    November 1st, 2013 at 12:46pm
  • AngelOfBlood

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    Yay new chapter!
    I loved it ^-^
    HOWEVER i do have a few points... The layout of the page makes it abit difficult to read continuity and pacing wise. Maybe it's because it's on the right side of the page instead of the left... But that could just be me xP
    ALSO I think some greater detail into what they're actually doing would be nice. Like all of a sudden his eyes turned black and plague fell asleep. I know it's fairly obvious what happened; but an extra word here and there wouldn't hurt >.<
    ANYWAY it was great... I loved it... Need a new chapter... Like now... Awesomes...
    October 30th, 2013 at 01:46pm
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    damn net sending it loads of times :/
    October 30th, 2013 at 02:18am
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    wooo!
    October 30th, 2013 at 02:15am
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    woooo!
    October 30th, 2013 at 02:15am
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    woooo!
    October 30th, 2013 at 02:15am
  • AngelOfBlood

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    yeah!
    I know it's just filler, but it's kept the unquenchable thirst for more of this; sated for now xP
    BEWARNED though... If i have to wait years for the next chapter there'll be HELL TO PAY!!
    October 20th, 2013 at 01:40pm
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    Woo for a new chapter!
    The final few paragraphs seemed a bit rushed though. One moment she was in the house and it felt that by the next line she was talking to Guardian. If you get my meaning?
    But it was good other than that ^-^
    August 31st, 2013 at 11:27am
  • AngelOfBlood

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    Schweet... I haven't written in so long! Perhaps this will inspire me?
    It's lookin good so far!
    August 27th, 2013 at 08:16pm
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    @ AngelOfBlood
    Yes, yes we are :)
    August 25th, 2013 at 06:55pm
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    ...Y..You're back??
    August 25th, 2013 at 06:36pm
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