Baby Doll - Comments

I hope this story gets updated or you continue on soon. I really enjoyed it:)

oh shit, I can't wait to see where this goes from here!
It's so different than the others I have read.
Please update soon.

oh shit, I can't wait to see where this goes from here!
It's so different than the others I have read.
Please update soon.

This is great! I've read quite a few dark fics in the past and still do from time to time, but this one really stood out and I like it! Normally abduction stories seem kind of mindless - there's no real motive to why they've been kidnapped, or if there is it's cheesy (usually something revolving around sex) and the reader is told right away, so I love how different this is. "Charles" obvious has a motive and you've hinted at it enough to get me interested but held it back enough to keep me curious, if you get me. He's a really interesting character so far in that I'm not sure how I feel about him, I mean, the guy obviously has issues but I want to know more about him and why he does what he does.

Nicole is great, too - she acts realistically, especially at the point where she tries to escape, which is great because there's nothing more frustrating in one of these stories than somebody acting unrealistically (not that I know exactly how one person would act in that situation, but y'know, I can imagine.) I also love the attention to detail in your writing! Like how you mention that she always forgets to bring a coat, the description of the noodles or of Hazel etc. etc. - it just makes it all the more realistic. On an unrelated note - I loved the line "All people care to see is the facade you put up. They could care a shit less about what's really happening beneath the surface."

Keep up the good work!

So far, I love it. This is one of the first abduction stories I've read that hasn't been all about sex...and while I don't mind those, I do like this approach. It's different. =) I like that you actually go through her thought processes instead of jumping around and leaving us saying "What?" You have me really curious about what happened to Hazel's mom, and why exactly he chose Nicole? Was it just random or did he pick her specifically for some reason?

I can't wait for the next chapter! Subscribed and recommended.

Hey there =D
Wow this is really interesting. I want to know more of what is going to happen, did he put her in the room for a reason? Did he have cameras in the room? I want to know more to why he has the woman he takes play mommy to hazel or has them play mommy to hazel, what happened to her real mother?

Keep going, I want to see where else this goes.

Your doing amazing so far.

Hi there! *Comment Swap*
I really like your layout, its pretty good. And the story is interesting as well. This isn't what I'd read by habit, but it kept me interested. Your description of Nicole's emotions is brilliant. And I can't really say I like Charles haha. I haven't read all the chapters yet, but I will. But my favorite line has to be "Why on Earth I find it interesting is truly beyond me. I've always been a little.....off in the head." LOL I thought she's so cute. I'm definitely recommending this.

Well done on the story! I hope you keep up the brilliant work. :)

Comment swap: This is unexpected, I never imagined that the story would begin in walmart haha. I like the way you write about how she feels and what she thinks. Also the little things like that she noticed something missing and went to look under the car. I really like it. Keep going!

Comment swap: This is unexpected, I never imagined that the story would begin in walmart haha. I like the way you write about how she feels and what she thinks. Also the little things like that she noticed something missing and went to look under the car. I really like it. Keep going!

Sorry for the double post. :/

This is good. Can't wait to find out what happens next. Update soon please?

@ Enteis-Love
Perhaps. I don't wanna give everything away but it's not what you'd think.

@ Synical
Her mother? I'm guessing her real mother did something really bad to them so he flipped his shit?

@ Synical

Her mother? I'm guessing her real mother did something really bad to them so he flipped his shit?

@ Enteis-Love
Baby Doll means.....she's a play thing. She's not meant to be used as a Sex Slave or anything. "Charles" isn't interested in that with her. She's meant to become something for Hazel.

This is rather interesting but I wonder which way you're using baby doll in this cause theres more than one meaning. Do you mean play thing? Or sex slave? I kinda get the way you mean it but at the same time kinda confused.

This is rather interesting but I wonder which way you're using baby doll in this cause theres more than one meaning. Do you mean play thing? Or sex slave? I kinda get the way you mean it but at the same time kinda confused.

Update soon?

I loved that update! 'Charles' scares me to death. I love this and can't wait for more.

Yay, an update! loved it!!! "Charles' scares the crap out of me so far!!! and the little girl creeped me out too! cant wait for more.