i agree with unapalomayaunaflor (holy cow was that a hard name!) with pretty much EVERYTHING. this is outstanding, and makes me feel giddy to read. I hope you write more.
ps- if he doesnt get his car fixed, shes going to wake up and see a very familiar dent in it ;)
I will never get over how professional your writing sounds. It feels like I'm reading a published book and I love it! I seriously don't understand why you don't have more readers and comments!
The moment I started reading this update I became sucked into it and so involved that I was disappointed how short the chapter was! XD This story has an amazing start to it and it has me on edge to know more about Caleb and the girl! :D
I really REALLY like this story idea! It's unique and your writing is well written too! I'm curious to how this story is going to go and I can't wait to see! :D
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OMG AHHHHHHH XD I DID NOT REALIZE THIS WAS WRITTEN BY YOU UNTIL I SAW YOUR NAME ON THE SIDE! NOW THIS MAKES ME EVEN MORE EXCITED!!