October 11th, 2013 at 01:59pm
Okay so, like the other three, I am here from the Seasons of Change contest.
First off, I love Editors so the fact you based it off of a song by them is perfect!
Anyway, as soon as I began reading this story I knew it was going to be something special. Yes, the lack of capitalisation stuck out but to me that's what makes the story all the more haunting and interesting. It's like you've written it in a way that mirrors the way we as people think, if that makes sense?
You leave the reader thinking, wondering about their own life and how much sense your story makes. To me, that is truly remarkable. In a way, this piece is sort of heartbreaking. I felt saddened at the end of this, whether that's to do with what you wrote or the fact it was the end of the story is left to be decided. All in all, the way you write, the poetic and honest words you string together, is utterly beautiful.
Well done!
(I bought the song, I want you to know that, you're a catalyst for my iTunes addiction, thank you )