Your Eyes Caught Mine - Comments

This story was absolutely adorable! I seriously loved it and I'm not even all that into fanfiction.

Oh my goodness. This is literally the cutest thing ever and I am so glad that I've stumbled upon it. :) Your details; the way you describe both Oli and Hayley is incredible. Especially without using Hayley's name until the very end. I like that it's a mutual shyness and sensitivity, not just one awkward character and having the whole story being about the outgoing character bringing them out of their shell.

It's just so realistic; like I have people like this that I see all the time. Not necessarily that I feel this deep a connection to that you describe, but it just feels so possible. It's beautifully written and structured overall.

Merry Christmas :)

I don't know why but I read your title then noticed that your banner doesn't contain any eyes in it and that interests me. It's not good or bad just something that made me look.

A million people board public transportation on their regular weekday.
I feel that this should be "Millions of people..." because it sounds too exact otherwise.

For me, the way you write is too informative. You've very consistent with it though which is awesome, because it's very easy to follow.

I like the way that Oli comes across. He's seems shy and sensitive and mature. I haven't really read a story on here with a lead male character like that. This story would usually read from the girl's point of view and it would be... ehh. Not so great. So, I like the spin you've put on it.

Here's your Halloween treat!

First off, the layout is beautiful. It's so simple, and yet so elegant and appropriate for the plot line you have. Everything matches perfectly and I just love that wintery-type feel you've got going.

Going off the first chapter, what you've got here is just lovely and so unique. I felt like I was reading an original fiction, as opposed to a fan fiction. I loved how you portrayed Oli as though he were a creation all your own and I really enjoyed it. I think I'll definitely come back and read the rest of it after I'm done with my candy bowl because I really want to see what happens next!

Great job with this!

I've been trying to figure out what to say that wouldn't sound too fangirl-y but you know what, I give up.

This story was lovely. I adore it. It's not easy to pull off the "imagined scenario" route in a plot but you executed
it perfectly and it only heightened the anticipation for the protagonist to be with the love interest.
I like how you made Oli's character as if he was your own; he wasn't just a carbon copy, he has very unique
characteristics but he was also relatable & realistic. I also didn't think I'd be one to ship a "crack pairing"
as you call it, but Oli & Hayley? Yeah, totally going to ship that, no one is going to stop me.

There's just something so beautiful about a simple introduction between the two characters, the "what if?"
of the many possibilities that could happen between them. It left me with such a vivid picture in my mind
of the characters being connected and happy. Leaves me with a fuzzy feeling, pulling at my heartstrings.

Anyway, I have been officially converted to shipping this pairing and I hope to read more from you soon.

The summary is just adorable. It's funny how one out of a million can actually catch your eye when you think about it. You write so very well. I don't really know who Oliver Sykes is, I know what he looks like though.

I have to say I adore that you didn't get her a perfect smile that everyone seems to go for. You know, perfect straight white teeth with no gaps. I have a gap, so I find this pretty neat, since I've always read gap = unattractive flaw.

Your writing is very good. And I just adored the winter-y setting. x)

This is awesome :') Yay!

Fuck, I love you. I ship Oli and Hayley a lot and reading this story just added to it! You're a great writer!

This is very well written, I love your writing style. I'm not much of a fan of the band you are writing about, but I love the whole idea of the story. I have read but one chapter, but I know that I will probably continue to read it as soon as more chapters come out! :) Anywho, great job and I will be writing your recommendation blog for this story quite soon! :)

This is perfectly written with about 0 errors. It also had me hooked in the summary and had me cheering Oli on the whole time! I love the description and quiet attention to detail, not overdone or too much. You transition from one scene to the next so well without even having to tell the reader literally. Oh my goodness.. I definitely didn't expect that at the end. Good twist! Love your writing style.