The Uncertain Journey to Space - Comments

Thanks, Bright Lights. I'll definitely fix that. Thanks for the encouragement also; I'm now more inspired to continue it. Please continue reading it. And about the breifness of the chapters, I kinda like my stories to be fast-paced and not slow-motion. Thanks again!!!

I randomly decided to look for a story about space travel and this came up first, so I thought I'd give it a shot. Personally, I like it so far.

I think the first chapter is a bit short. There isn't much detail, but for this story, that may just work in your favor. Some people overuse detail to the point where it slows down the story. From what I can see, you're a talented writer. I didn't see much for mistakes, though there was one thing.

I bet you wouldn't want to get into a fight with him. Since the story isn't being written from a narrators point of view, you might want to change that sentence. Maybe to something similar to "he was the kind of man you wouldn't want to get into a fight with."

You're doing very good. Keep it up!(: