I loved the story! It was truly brilliant and everything fit together perfectly. I am glad everything good came out of it, I also loved the ending, kind of like a little lesson to be learned from the story. You have a little bit of editing to do for little mistakes, but other than that it was great. I was constantly on my toes because I never knew what was going to happen. You are a great writer, and I look forward to some other works by you!! :D