Solitude - Comments

A nice drabble, but it kinda confused me.
First I was beginning to dislike the guy when he said he could just stand there and watch her silently. I mean WHY? Why couldn't he give it a try? But then the last para left me more confused. He loved her, but she didn't give a damn...why? I mean it was stated she had one night stands just to have someone to hold onto, so why couldn't she try loving a guy who loved her?
Actually it was wonderfully written, but some facts left me confused. I guess I'm being too logical...
Anyway, it was a nice read. Enjoyed the sentiment it left behind. :)

Here from free reads blog : I really enjoyed this! You had so much emotion behind ever word and I really felt what was written. You have a beautiful writing style! The ending was so harsh and sad, it was amazing! Great job!

I think this may be my favorite drabble of yours. I love the picture and quote you used for this. I like how the guy keeps time for how much he sees her. I like how your characters always feel so much emotion for each other. I love the contrast between how much he loves her and how at the end he's like "I love you and you don't give a damn".

All your wording seems right. Great job.

I think this may be my favorite drabble of yours. I love the picture and quote you used for this. I like how the guy keeps time for how much he sees her. I like how your characters always feel so much emotion for each other. I love the contrast between how much he loves her and how at the end he's like "I love you and you don't give a damn".

All your wording seems right. Great job.

Here to judge the Walk A Mile In Someone Else's Shoes contest!

The layout is nice and simple, and I appreciate that you incorporated the picture chosen into it. I'm not one for patterns in the background, but this one is simple so it works.

This piece has such an extreme hopelessness that it's almost palpable. I love that even though the narrator is talking about this sad girl, you get a sense of them, of who they are without them having to really say anything. I'd like to believe that maybe this ends happily, but it's just so depressing that I know it's not going to happen. And I really like the little details you added. Like her dyed, red hair, and the sound her Converse makes when they hit the pavement. It's those small details that really help a story a long. I don't think the shoes were necessarily were worked into the story, but this was written very well.

I didn't notice any grammar/spelling errors, so good job on that.

This was excellent and I really enjoyed reading it. Thanks for entering!

This was despairingly cute. I am so desperate to believe that after the story ends, everything works out happily ever after, but I feel like it's doomed from the start at the same time. Urggh, so good.

This was despairingly cute. I am so desperate to believe that after the story ends, everything works out happily ever after, but I feel like it's doomed from the start at the same time. Urggh, so good.

This was despairingly cute. I am so desperate to believe that after the story ends, everything works out happily ever after, but I feel like it's doomed from the start at the same time. Urggh, so good.

This is a very sad story of unrequited love. I almost got the feeling that the narrator was her guardian angel. Not sure if that's true or not, haha, but that was sort of the vibe I got. Like the narrator was captivated by the girl but having to watch her suffering from the sidelines. Admittedly I'm a bit of a sucker for tragic love stories as well as happily ever afters, so this was right up my alley.

This is both beautiful and sad, your words are powerful and the emotions they bring to the piece as a whole is strong... You already know what an amazing writing I think you are but it's pieces like this that just leave me in awe! Good job chick!

Oh, and I know you didn't ask for it, but I recommended this because it's too good not to :)

Oh, and I know you didn't ask for it, but I recommended this because it's too good not to :)

Wow, this was phenomenal. You are truly gifted and blessed, I adored this! I love how there's this underlying theme of "I love you, but it's not like you ever even cared" vs. "I love you and that's why I push you away". I love when those two come together, as heartbreaking as it is! My favorite line would have to be "Despite the smatter of warm rain, your heart stays cold and dry". Can you share some of your perfectness with me, that'd be great ^_^ The title is perfect for your story and I cannot stress enough how great of an author you are. Definitely something I'd buy off of Amazon... just saying!! ^_^

God Bless!!

xoxo

This is really powerful and emotional for both characters- the one living the sad life and the other witnessing it, helpless to do anything. Great job! xx