Wow. This story is really magnificent! I love the structure of your writing and the idea of it all is great :) The main character is so relateable and understandable. There's hardly anything not brilliant about this. All I can say is that the writing is small, but that adds to the story, making it more mysterious in a way. So personally, I do really like this and I will look forward to the following chapters xx
thank you so much !! this is actually a re-write of a story i had posted on here way back in 2009 so :')