Servant - Comments

@ chasing stars
Fixed it! Thank you for your comment and pointing those mistakes out as well! :D

This is very, very well done. I loved how you wrote this from the point of view of the umbrella. I was not expecting that, but it was great. Excellent use of personification. I also really enjoyed your word choice, like "bumbling" and "polished'. You have great control over your language. This was clear, concise, and made sense. Now to be picky. In the second paragraph, I think you meant to say "Hannah" instead of "Josephine". Also in the second paragraph, your use of the word "fleetingly" doesn't make much sense. Would it make more sense if you just said "fleeting" instead? Other than those two things, I have no complaints. I very much enjoyed this. Excellent job.