Here to judge the Walk A Mile In Someone Else's Shoes contest!
I really like that the layout is nice and simple, and you incorporated the picture chosen into it.
The one thing that really stuck out to me about this piece was that there was just an overall lack of detail. You mention that the main character doesn't straighten her hair, but nothing about the color or length. And Lee is said to be attractive but there isn't any details, other than his height. And considering you only had 300+ words, I think that a lot more could just be added to this. The ending also seems very abrupt and I feel like there's just something I'm not quite getting. But all of their personalities came across very well. Lexy seems very whiny, like this uptight, high-maintenance girl, and the main character is easy going and laid back. This piece has great character voice and I enjoyed that.
I didn't notice any errors in spelling/grammar, so good job on that!
All in all, I enjoyed reading this. Thanks for entering!
I really like that the layout is nice and simple, and you incorporated the picture chosen into it.
The one thing that really stuck out to me about this piece was that there was just an overall lack of detail. You mention that the main character doesn't straighten her hair, but nothing about the color or length. And Lee is said to be attractive but there isn't any details, other than his height. And considering you only had 300+ words, I think that a lot more could just be added to this. The ending also seems very abrupt and I feel like there's just something I'm not quite getting. But all of their personalities came across very well. Lexy seems very whiny, like this uptight, high-maintenance girl, and the main character is easy going and laid back. This piece has great character voice and I enjoyed that.
I didn't notice any errors in spelling/grammar, so good job on that!
All in all, I enjoyed reading this. Thanks for entering!