You and Me - Comments

Wow, I wasn't expecting that, I love the flow of this drabble/one-shot. I like how at first it's about happy and filled with fluff but then it changes to how she's feeling right then and now, the emotion she feels is so raw. I loved this, you're an incredible writer!

I love the layout of this story (not the picture version, just the text and word flow); I love how in the beginning it quickly shifts from the couple being together to the guy being with another girl and I love the sequence of questions throughout the story. This story is very realistic with its emotions because generally with a breakup involving someone extra, the person being heartbroken has to choose whether to blame themselves or the other person. The other realistic thing that you present is how the old girl compares herself to the new girl and wonders what he likes better about the new girl. The lone questions that are paragraphs in themselves really sealed it off and showed that the old girl is now blaming him and realizing it’s not her fault. I would say that if you would have shortened it and brought it more to the point that I would have fallen even more in love with it, but this is a great entry and one of my top contenders.

Layout is very pretty, and very easy to read. The photograph is a nice touch to the storyline. At first I was a bit confused. It sounded like the two were together than all of a sudden there's a her in the picture and I had to go back because I was like wait what? I honestly liked this enough that I wish there was more to it. I wish there was a longer backstory about their relationship and this guy who jumps from 'friend' to 'friend'. Very nice job.

Halloween Gift! It's late. Sorry.

This layout is really beautiful, I love the border image.

How could you do that to me? I was caught in this compelling romance that was just so effortlessly cute and in, like, a hundred words. Probably less. I'm bad a math. Then, you just rip it all away in one simple, sentence.

Though, I guess it represents real life.

Unexpected, but totally great. I didn't notice a single error and the story was just unbelievably brilliant.

Halloween Gift! It's late. Sorry.

This layout is really beautiful, I love the border image.

How could you do that to me? I was caught in this compelling romance that was just so effortlessly cute and in, like, a hundred words. Probably less. I'm bad a math. Then, you just rip it all away in one simple, sentence.

Though, I guess it represents real life.

Unexpected, but totally great. I didn't notice a single error and the story was just unbelievably brilliant.