There Is a Hell, Believe Me, I've Seen It. - Comments

Well, damn. That's like, a never ending Sykescest. Woo.

Hello! I'm from Mibba Magazine's "Things That Go Bump" Contest. First of all, thank you for making this very enjoyable. I was taken in the whole time. You written it with just enough information to the point I wasn't confused about which fandom this was or what was going on. However, I would look over the italics because that can be a little confusing. Though in the story I thought it was written very well. Where Oliver leaves the bus I would add some more detail because it seemed to be very rushed. It was stated it would take hours to make it to his flat, but it seemed only minutes. When he got home it was a it rushed there too. The twist at the ending was just the cherry on top! Great job!

Hello Kayla! I'm Juliana, one of the judges for the Bump In the Night Contest!
I enjoyed reading your entry because of it's flowing plot and likeable characters. However there are some slight mistakes and an error in italics, (everything after the words "eating them" in the fourth paragraph). My recommendations for you with this story and to possibly bring into your future contest entries, would be to provide a little bit of background to your characters so that readers will want the best for them when the story comes to an end. Another would be that during my time reading the story I found myself wondering why the zombies came to be and what kind of zombies they were. It might help to talk a little bit about why Oliver was away and what kind of things he did and use that as a gateway to talk about why there are zombies. Also just as a side note, earlier in the story you mentioned a dog living in the apartment but never mentioned it again, so (being the animal lover that I am) I wondered what happened to it. Overall I enjoyed reading your entry and the little twist at the end. Thank you so much for entering the contest!