Thank you for entering my contest and getting your entry in so early!
I wanted to start off by saying that I thought the original layout was really nice and made your story come more alive. I thought you did a wonderful job of integrating the word into a sentence. You really created a masterful piece of work, no doubt about that. I think the word fit beautifully. Your diction was impeccable. You need to pack a punch when writing six word stories because you have so little words to use, and you packed that punch. You told an incredible story in a total of 18 words, and it moved me.
In terms of the theme of the story, though it was present, and I felt a sense of serenity and calmness. I just wish that I would have gotten the sense of peace a little more throughout. I thought that though I did feel it, it just lacked a little bit of power.
Overall, you created such a wonderful piece of work. You need to be extremely proud of this.
I wanted to start off by saying that I thought the original layout was really nice and made your story come more alive. I thought you did a wonderful job of integrating the word into a sentence. You really created a masterful piece of work, no doubt about that. I think the word fit beautifully. Your diction was impeccable. You need to pack a punch when writing six word stories because you have so little words to use, and you packed that punch. You told an incredible story in a total of 18 words, and it moved me.
In terms of the theme of the story, though it was present, and I felt a sense of serenity and calmness. I just wish that I would have gotten the sense of peace a little more throughout. I thought that though I did feel it, it just lacked a little bit of power.
Overall, you created such a wonderful piece of work. You need to be extremely proud of this.