May 5th, 2017 at 06:20am
Wow! This was written beautifully. It is delicate and full of innocence. I love the little girl's awareness, that her father is finally coming home. It was very cute, sweet and realistic to read. This a piece, that I am sure a lot of people, who have parents in the forces, will comprehend in an emotional way. The layout is beautiful and goes perfectly well with the story.
There were a few punctuation marks missing, and some grammatical errors, that can e easily fix with another proof-reading glance.
In general, this was a good read.
Awww thank you very much! I definitely worked hard on it!! Appreicate your feedback and I'll take another look through the story and remove those errors!