I love the Star Wars references!!! The vocabulary you use is extremely sophisticated, which makes the idea of the piece even funnier!
My only criticism has nothing to do with the writing at all, that is faultless, but you need to leave spaces between paragraphs, it's part of the mibba rules. I didn't know this until a few weeks ago when my chaptered story was threatened with being taken off the site if I didn't sort it out!!! just a little heads up!
This was an amazing story, you totally deserved first prize!
My only criticism has nothing to do with the writing at all, that is faultless, but you need to leave spaces between paragraphs, it's part of the mibba rules. I didn't know this until a few weeks ago when my chaptered story was threatened with being taken off the site if I didn't sort it out!!!
This was an amazing story, you totally deserved first prize!