To Light up the Dark - Comments

Okay, #1: What in the world made you do a South Park fan fic. And #2: You are officially my hero for doing a South Park fan fic. I love this. The power struggle during the fight... the fight in general was well written. And you're writing in the view of my favorite SP Character!!! I love Kenny. The lines "Many have tried and succeeded" and "You and your crazy antics, you're going to get yourself killed one of these days" made me laugh.

The excerpts from the journal at the beginning of the chapters are interesting. And you do have really good descriptions throughout the chapters I read.

It's been a while since I've watched South Park, and I don't remember all the characters, but reading this kind of brought back some of it. This chapter seemed very to the point, and it's super easy for your reader to understand. Couldn't spot any grammar mistakes, and whatnot. Kyle was hilarious. Overall, you did a good job