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  • swell

    swell (150)

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    Hi there, I'm here to judge for the hockey team contest!

    I'll be honest, I was very confused with I guess, the plot? of this story. It jumped back and forth a lot and I wasn't sure what the point was - to show the friendship of Alex and Mike I guess? If so, I thought you did an okay job but as a non-hockey fan, I wish it had been more clear for the readers who don't watch hockey like I do. I agree with the previous commenter in that I thought there was a great range of emotion in this piece, making it not boring and interesting to read, but I do wish there was more of a plot or more going on, I guess.

    Thanks for entering!
    July 12th, 2017 at 07:44am
  • Ovie8

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    @ XSoulXLoverX
    Thanks so much. That really means a lot to me. I have an idea for a sequel to this story, so if I make it, I'll let you know! Thanks a lot!
    December 9th, 2013 at 08:50pm
  • XSoulXLoverX

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    I want to thank you so much for entering my contest!

    I think what you did well was capture the essence of Mike Green. I thought that you did it nicely and that you made me feel him as a person and I appreciated that a lot. I thought that you made Mike and Alex's friendship believable and that was nice to see. I think that you did a nice job in terms of having different emotions throughout and I liked that.

    I think that the plot had a lot of potential, but it needed more developing throughout.

    I did enjoy the story.
    December 9th, 2013 at 07:39pm
  • Ovie8

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    Thanks!! That means a lot to me.
    November 21st, 2013 at 04:12am
  • Thatmom

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    Love it:)
    November 21st, 2013 at 03:47am