July 12th, 2014 at 04:17am
this is a very strong drabble & i can't help but fall for it. i've been in the oc's position one too many times & instead of sleeping pills found other drugs to honestly send me to peace out of desperation. along with the other comments, i do agree that some stops & words make the flow of this wondrous drabble a bit awkward, but all in all this is very emotionally impacting.
tho i'm not as critical as spellbound, i do believe that with a quick proofread, you can fix many of the spelling//grammar errors. good job on this tho!
Anyway, I do quite like this drabble. It has an interesting story line and your character is developed well. This is a relatable topic to some people which makes this greater.
I did find that the banner didn't quite match the mood of the story. The banner made me think this was going to be about a crazy drug addict but in the end, I got a very solemn mood from her. I also found the repetition of She being used as a sentence starter and the stops made this piece kind of awkward. But this is still impacting.
I love how another escape for her is music. I think almost everyone can related to this. My favorite part of this is when the sleeping pills were described as a miracle.
All in all, this is a great piece :)