Gives You Hell - Comments

  • swell

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    Hi there, I'm here to judge for the hockey contest!

    Prior to reading this story I was pretty pleased to see the song you chose, since it's one of my faves and I couldn't help but look forward to what was to come.

    Aw, I really enjoyed this! It was such a cute read. I loved the way you built up Mack and Pat's relationship, from the memories of childhood bickering and annoyance to that flirty, I grew up in all the right places and only now you're noticing me. It's a trope used many times, but to me, it's an enjoyable one. I really enjoyed the pacing and the way this was written, it made for an easy read but still able to keep the reader interested. One thing I didn't like was how it was a bit rushed at the end but otherwise I really enjoyed it. Thanks for entering!
    July 12th, 2017 at 08:58am
  • XSoulXLoverX

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    Thank you for entering my contest! :)

    I think that this story is quite awesome! I almost forgot that I was judging it and that was a nice quality that it had. I think where you excelled the most was the connection between Patrick and Mack. I thought you made their connection: fun, teasing, adorable, and the list goes on. I felt as though they were real, and I felt as though they really captured relateable people. I think the story line you came up with is just wonderful, and I think you did it justice. I liked how you added in his sisters, and made them know each other from kids.

    I wish that the ending had seemed to be a little less rushed than it was. I also wish that the font color was not so similar to the background color. I thought had the font been easier to read, I would have enjoyed the story much, much more than I did, and let me tell you, I enjoyed it a whole lot!

    I really was pleased with this entry!
    December 10th, 2013 at 03:23am
  • midnightmssuki

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    @ Jayess
    He's not my usual type (which tends to swing dark hair, not blonde) but I have my moments too where I find myself oddly drawn to him.
    December 2nd, 2013 at 12:13pm
  • Jayess

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    Feel free to write alla Patrick Kane! He's like completely opposite in terms of guys I've always liked but there's something about him that appeals. In theory, anyway; I can't imagine actually finding him appealing IRL because he's so much younger than I am. Now, mother him a bit, sure. Feed him, absolutely. Clean up after him, not a chance in hell.
    December 2nd, 2013 at 07:23am
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    @ FLSweet82
    Thanks! :)
    December 1st, 2013 at 01:28am
  • FLSweet82

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    Love it
    December 1st, 2013 at 12:51am
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    Live it
    December 1st, 2013 at 12:51am