The Cell on the Left - Comments

  • Harleen Winchester.

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    @ Lulie Belle
    Oh goodness! I don't even know what to say right now. I've been having such a difficult time getting more out because I felt is was inadequate. This motivates me to keep posting and I appreciate you taking the time to give me feedback. This is my first Loki so I was a wee bit nervous. Wow I just can't stop smiling. Thank you, dear! I'll try to get something out to you soon. Arms
    February 1st, 2014 at 06:09am
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    I love this! There was one tiny grammar thing that I saw, but I don't even remember where it was, so it doesn't matter. But this is really good. I want more! I swear, your writing just grabbed my by the collar of my shirt and wouldn't let go! The descriptions are beautiful and horrific at the same time. The dragging thing, ew! But nice touch. And Loki!!! I love your LokI!! I used to dialogue for someone as Loki, and now I feel that mine was so insufficient compared to yours! I need to take notes, and I want more of this soon!!
    January 30th, 2014 at 10:44pm
  • Harleen Winchester.

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    @ Ailurophile
    Omg I had no idea you were a Loki fan! Whoo! I'm such a mindreader. Arms

    She's not what you expect her to be, I'll tell you that. :3

    Subscribed??! Omg, thank youuuu!
    December 23rd, 2013 at 04:05am
  • Ailurophile

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    I WAS SO HAPPY WHEN I REALIZED YOU LINKED ME TO A LOKI STORY! :D

    First chapter was really good. I love all the action that took place, it really kept my interest. I like that it's not a damsel in distress kind of thing. I wonder who and what the main character is...I can't wait for more.

    Subscribed and recommended!
    December 23rd, 2013 at 03:55am
  • Harleen Winchester.

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    @ Unnatural Angel
    Wow thank you so much! ^-^ I'm glad you still like it even though you aren't in the fandom. Merry Christmas dear! Arms
    December 22nd, 2013 at 03:27am
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    First up I love love love your description, it's perfect and relays the images of the story perfectly in my minds eye, it all flows nicely and I didn't spot any mistakes as I read through.

    I don't really know a lot about Loki if I'm honest, however I am going to stick around and see where you take this because you've got my interest peaked, good job x
    December 22nd, 2013 at 02:04am
  • Harleen Winchester.

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    @ domi823
    Whoo! Thank you very much. Arms
    December 20th, 2013 at 11:31pm
  • Dom.

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    Hello! I am delivering your Christmas gift :)

    I don't normally read Loki stories but I love this! It is very intriguing. You wrote how the character was feeling so well! It was so easy for me to feel what was happening to her. Your descriptions are perfectly written as well. Everything is going on in my head. It's like a movie.

    I think you should keep going with this. It's very interesting and I can't wait for more!
    December 20th, 2013 at 08:14pm
  • Harleen Winchester.

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    @ Miss.J.isamonster
    Oh goodnessez. I love big nice comments like this. I wanted to make it a little surprising when he finally showed up. My Heroine is a little bit careless and way too curious to just keep walking. tehe Gods know I wouldn't pass his cell either! I'm honestly still trying to figure out where to start adding her story. I have the whole story planned out mostly, I just have no idea how to pace it. o.O
    Arms Merry Christmas and thank you! ^v^
    December 14th, 2013 at 02:34pm
  • Miss.J.isamonster

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    Oh, Loki, you're such a little shit!

    I can't believe that I didn't realize that this was going to involve Loki until he went and made himself known! Ugh... He's such a little shit. I love the way you've captured him, it's perfect, the fact that every description of him is nothing short of mischievous! The narrator is brilliant as well! Of course she should have known that he was a bad idea! But the fact that she ignored that is absolutely fantastic because it sets the stage for, what I believe, is going to be one hell of a story! Especially since I'm curious to know how the hell she ended up behind a cell!
    December 13th, 2013 at 09:18pm
  • Harleen Winchester.

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    @ Lokison.
    I agree with you on the layout. I was in a hurry to get anything up there that wasn't the default (because I freaking hate that layout). I'm just not sure what exactly picture to use. I was a little frightened with doing his dialogue since he's such an intense character. I'm not going to give away much, but she's really going to wish she would've ignored him. Thank you again! Arms

    @ Elf Kentin.
    I can totally see that. Now as I'm rereading, it seems my Heroine has added her own seasoning without my knowledge. I doubt she would've tried to escape at all if that idiot didn't start ruffing her up. Those guardsmen deserved a lot more than they got and I was happy to kill them for you.

    And well.. I would totally die if he even looked at me. Like, seriously. tehe I would just fall over and stop breathing and just DIE. I kind of want to shake my Heroine. Who cares if he's lying? He's lying to you, woman! Go with it! But I digress. Happy holidays and thank you for the comment! Arms
    December 10th, 2013 at 07:19am
  • JckWhite

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    Sorry this took me awhile to get to this story D:

    First off I wish the layout was better for this :( I know I normally don't care for layout image but for this story it seems that it should look as good as the story.

    I love how you've got this story started with the dungeons because most people do not start their fan fictions this way. Your writing is wonderful and it flows well with the plot that I'm assuming you have going on for this :)

    This character is a on fire!!!! Literally she can make fire which is awesome having Loki paired up with someone who does a certain type of magic. I can not wait to see what these two characters are going to do in the next few chapters :D

    Loki's lines are perfect! You've done such a good job and I would have to say it is a risk for her to trust him...he's a good liar.

    You really have this idea going for you and I hope to see more of it soon lady!

    I enjoyed reading this very much babes:)
    December 10th, 2013 at 05:25am
  • kim wonshik.

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    This is a really interesting story so far! I love the way you structure the sentences in the beginning. It makes me feel like she's so over everything already and just doesn't care anymore, and the way you described the stench as a "fog" was a really good comparison! Ugh, those Guardsmen need to learn some manners and an attitude adjustment. The way you described Loki was great! I love the way he was like, "At your service, my lady" because I can just totally haer him saying that! Happy face Oh, Loki... In Love

    This is a really great way to start your story so kudos to you! Keep up the great work! Cute Oh, and happy holidays!
    December 9th, 2013 at 09:11pm
  • Harleen Winchester.

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    @ naruto uzumaki
    I've never written in this fandom before so it's good to know I'm doing okay. Thank you! Arms Also I'll let you know when my candy is up.
    December 9th, 2013 at 02:02am
  • kili the dwarf

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    Hey there, Here is your Christmas gift!

    Now normally, I don't really read Loki stories, however I will say that the descriptions of the beginning half of the chapter we nicely written. It was just enough to make me feel her pain.

    I think it's a very nice start and I do believe you should keep going with it, there's a lot of potential here.
    December 9th, 2013 at 01:18am
  • Harleen Winchester.

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    @ P.B.Darkside
    I was so unsure about it at first. Arms I'm so glad you liked it! I'm working on the third chapter now and editing the second, so I should have something up a little later tonight. ^-^
    December 6th, 2013 at 03:02am
  • kipderder

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    You have caught my attention. I am greatly intrigued by the first chapter. You have a fantastic way of describing things. I can't wait to see what happens next!
    December 6th, 2013 at 01:57am