Dancing With Demons - Comments

@ OMFGitsBeckiie
YAY!

@ InMyOwnWorld
@ deathbatc!nt
Dah! Thank you so much guys :) I'm working on the next chapter now!

just read threw all your chapters and i freaking love it!!! cant wait for the next chapter!!! :D :D :D

Please post again! The last chapter was good! Keep up the good work!

@ girlthata7xknows
I rarely leave you guys hanging! I needed to at least once xD. I'll be updating soon so you won't be hanging on for too long :)

Holy shit, hope she'll be alright! :O And you leave us hanging... :(

I love this story! Can't wait to see where Zacky is taking Haylee! Please Update soon!!

Sorry, haven't had time to read. Work is hectic. But, OUCH. I kept rubbing my eyes when she was ejecting ink in her irises, lol. Loving the new chapters. Can't wait for more. :)

@ nana1bordbar
@ InMyOwnWorld
I'm so glad you guys are enjoying it! And I'm so glad to hear you love the things I write ^_^ I'm working on the update now and hope to have it up within a day or two.

Finally took the time to read your story and I have to say that I love everything you write! PLease please post another chapter soon!!

This is such an unexpected story wow...your a genius! Please update soon <3

Oh, how much I have been looking forward to reading this update! Super sorry that it took me so long to read it and comment on it, though! Crazy week and all, but you should know one of the things that kept me going was looking forward to having a nice relaxing afternoon and getting to read this! :D

So yeah, on to the comment. Well, obviously, I knew it was going to be a good chapter when I saw that it was in Zacky's point of view. duh. But seriously, it was interesting having a different point of view this time, and seeing it from a slightly different perspective, just because the guys obviously know what's going on and everything, whereas Haylee is... more attentive to certain details? Just because she's not used to the location and situation, you know? Buttttt, I have to say, as much as I liked seeing things from Zack's point of view, I missed Haylee's entertaining commentary on things. But that's a good thing, obviously, because it just proves that I really do like her.

It's absolutely adorable to hear that she's been sneaking into his room (or "sneaking") at night and staying with him. I got really confused at their conversation about reading and her birthday and everything, though. Obviously her whole death and new life and everything is still a mystery, and I totally get that, but I'm just vocalizing my thoughts here so you know where my head's at: I'm so lost on this. Stalking the character page has told me that obviously the guys are much older than they appear, so I can only assume that Haylee was, too, before dying, but now she's 23 (24?). So, that tells me that this new life of hers was actually a complete rebirth, and she's been away from the guys for all of those years now (which, on a different note: I'm now officially heartbroken for Zacky. I can't believe he had to deal with that for so long!). OHHHHHHHH holy crap, re-reading this now has made me understand the reading comment. I was so confused trying to figure out why he chose to say 23/24 years about it, when he's obviously been reading for longer (well, hopefully, not obviously), but now I get it; he was saying that he was used to her reading a lot, even though he hasn't been around her and seen her do it in so many years! ...right? I'm still a little lost here.

I laughed out loud at the whole 'Fence' thing, though! It's great to be able to see Hayl's jokes even though it's not her narrating. And then the football game was great, obviously, and I like that she had a reason for being good at it this time because of her brother, but in the past, she wasn't good at it. It's just nice to see the balance there, and that she has flaws and isn't perfect at everything (even though we obviously learned that with the creepy servant thing). Seriously, I'll say this to you again: I love that you're able to make a character that has strengths and weaknesses, but those weaknesses don't make her come off as a damsel in distress. Love you for that! (This whole thing raised questions about her family again -- and not her demon one. Does she miss her brother? Why hasn't this come up in conversation yet?)

The rest of that whole scene was nice; it was a pleasant read, and very relaxing, which was probably hugely needed compared to the drama in the past few chapters. I thought it was cool to see Zack with his hellhound, and it's just a nice relationship that they seem to have with their hellhounds. I really like that concept you created! I also particularly enjoyed Hayl's "little bastard" comment to Zacky. xD

I enjoyed her interaction with Ron, too. He was a douche, who totally deserved that. I was actually a bit surprised to see the guys cut her off, though. Hell has rules about killing others? Interesting! But her whole power and lost-in-the-moment thing was cool; it'll be interesting to see how she develops further in that.

But yeah, I liked this update, and it was a great thing to read and relax to. It wasn't my favorite chapter, but that's only because I'm still completely obsessed with that meeting-the-guys-the-first-time-and-finding-out-she's-married-to-Zack scene. xD Keep up the ahmazing work!

And dude, you're far too kind! That shoutout really made my night, you have no idea. If it were possible to virtually hug someone, that's what'd be happening right now.

@ Liera_Fufu
I'm glad you're enjoying it :) I'm working on the next update now ^.^

I just loooove Zee Vee fics :3 no matter what, he is just so darn adorable! I like how everything is new for her. Her feelings are new-ish. She's like regaining her crush on him and that is just so cute ^_^ I'd be terrified of that thing to! It was always watching her. Sooo creeeeepyyyyy. Continuing to read!

@ jntt
Lmaooo, I'm glad you're enjoying this. And if a servant just so happens to appear in your room, do as Matt and Zack said and just be assertive with it, tell it to leave xD
I'm glad this story is stirring up those types of reactions and emotions. That means I'm doing my job as a writer ^_^ You can ask Haylee about borrowing Fidem lmao. I'm working on the next chapter. It's slowly but surely coming, the holiday kind of got into the way of writing, but hey, I got some really cool shit! But i'm working on it now :D

Woah, I just found this so here I was reading this in the dark at 3am and those, um, servants came. I thought "hey cute house pets, yaay" and then I clicked the picture. When the part where Haley is alone in her room and turning the light on and there's cracking, hissing and fuck I hear a door crack in my house and I almost fell of my bed. I had to go under the blankets :D God I'm still scared and I picture them in my head. And I still keep looking at the pic on my phone, because I'm trying to figure out what the hell are they?? There is something familiar, but nope, they're not housepets. Could I please borrow Fidem? :)

I was looking for a good Zacky V story and I've found it. God, you're good, I'm hooked! I have a nice feelin' of this journey :D and a bit scary. I also like Haylee and yeshh, super powers!! Okay bye for now! -jntt

@ addictedsevenfold.
Ugh, my god. Your comment just made me the happiest bitch on Mibba.
I am so fucking glad you're enjoying this story, especially after reading yours. I have big plans for this story. And to be quite honest, this is the first story I've started writing where i've had at least eighty percent of the story planned out, including the end. Usually it's just on a whim and I leave the other twenty percent for random idea's and possible ways to twist the end to my liking.

As for Haylee, I am a lot like you in the main OC department. I'm usually particular and critical about them. I enjoy when they're believable and not something that is so cliche. So I based her mostly off of myself, having her deal with certain situations the way I would. The portion in the first chapter for instance, where she finds Matt and Brian in the ally. I would try to assert my own dominance and stand my ground as opposed to scream and run. That's just how I am, though I would most definitely be on edge and probably scared shitless.

The whole idea of Zacky being her husband? I love the dude, well at least the idea of him. I don't personally know him so there is no way I could actually love him xD, lol. But I gotta say, Zacky V is the man for me. Having him as Haylee's husband definitely makes a bit of a twist, and to be honest, that was a part of the twenty percent I didn't originally plan. My good friend/co-author and I discussed the possibility of him being her husband and it all seemed to fall into place better, along with her being there in a past life. That wasn't originally planned either, though it fits for the rest of the story.

I really, truly am beyond ecstatic that you're liking this story! I am working on the next update now and hope you enjoy this update along with future updates until the end :) And thank you so much for all your kind words and input, along with suggestions. Comments like yours make me feel the need, as well as the want, to continue on with this story :)

Holy hell, girl? Why didn't you tell me you were writing a story like this!? Seriously! I would have been stalking this thing from day one! So now you're going to have to deal with an obnoxiously long comment, because I've got four chapters to cover!

Ohohoh, is it weird if I comment on how I love your disclaimer? Because seriously, I saw that and then got a few strange looks for randomly bursting out into laughter.

So, I usually am an asshole about not liking main characters, but by the first chapter I could already tell that I was going to like Haylee just fine. Seriously. I dig her. I like how she interacted with the regular customers (and I really like how you didn't do the overly cliche thing of making everyone actually actively hitting on her because you want people to think she's ohsohot -- I actually thought the Brandon thing was hilarious!). And then her relationship with her younger brother: love it! That was just so perfect, and I was totally laughing at the way they talk to each other!

Also: Cousin? What? (I have to admit I was slightly disappointed for all of no real time, just because I had been hoping it was going to be a Matt fic... a non incestuous one... but then Zacky appeared so I was actually elated at the way this played out so far). I loved the way Haylee actually stood up for herself and didn't run away whimpering when she saw the guys step up in front of her, by the way! (What kind of well-trained bartender used to working night shifts would have done that?) Seriously though, love that she went ahead and tried to punch him! Also, you should know that I was so confused and curious about what the hell they'd done to her, and then that little twist of Matt's powers was epic; love it!

I'm also totally enjoying how Matt's the guy doing all of the gentle coaxing; it's totally believable, don't get me wrong, especially because they're cousins, but it's just funny to picture. And I've just got to love Brian being a bit of a dick, but not in a rude way... I mean, they're demons, right? I'm glad he acts like it sometimes! (:

And oh god, I do not have words to describe how much my heart hurt for Zacky when I went back and re-read that whole exchange, knowing that he was her husband and everything! It must've been so heartbreaking for him to have her ask 'who?' and not remember him at all! (And then I got all disappointed again for a brief moment, because I was thinking Zacky was her brother or something, and for some reason she had their mother's name, and not her fathers, so she wasn't a Sanders... but woo! Imagine my excitement when I found out she was married to Zacky! ...I should stop jumping to conclusions because I'm just psyching myself out.) And of course I'm also digging that Zack's a puck. That's probably going to be hilarious in the future!

I like all of the different demons you came up with, though; that was very creative of you! (And the "I'm glad you're not green" line: died of laughter right there!!) Anyways, I also really like all of Haylee's mental jokes about things; it gives the story some real entertainment and just makes her character all the more believable and, I don't know, just cool. I really do like her, which surprises me quite a bit, because, like I said, I usually am a snob about female characters. Especially because she put the ring on the right finger, not because she was being overly attached (or, honestly, that'd be creepy if she was already trying to jump into the marriage) but just because she wanted to respect the meaning of it. I really like her, alright? And her momentary freak out; I like how you're not giving her any free passes, but making her have to deal with things in a more realistic way, even if she was a demon and whatnot. I like that she wasn't able to dominate the servant on her own, that even though she tried to do as instructed, she just temporarily couldn't, but it still wasn't like she was running screaming without trying at first, you know? I like how she's not a wimp, but still has fear and has to deal with that, especially when it comes to getting overwhelmed by learning that her dream was a memory and everything.

And I like how normal Hell is; I think that's a pretty cool concept that you came up with! And the Hellhounds, of course; those dudes are chill, too. Especially because they can communicate -- that's an interesting twist!

Oooooh, the sister character seems interesting! I'm going to be waiting to see what that turns out like! Andddd now I'm concerned about Brian. Why are Matt and Zacky so anxious? I mean, I know why she's not fully comfortable with him, and I feel like I'm being minor-ly paranoid because of the whole he's-an-incubus thing... ah, I'm anxious as hell right now. And then the bedroom, really? Were you trying to make my paranoia worse? (Although I like that she felt like she needed to reassure Zack about wanting to bond with him, too, though!)

Naturally, I'm still very unsure about this sister of hers. She seemed... spiteful, and dangerous, in that regard. But at the same time, I can get it if maybe she's just trying to get her sister back (and away from Matt, if she never approved of the power-thing.) buttttt I'm thinking that that might be me just having wishful thoughts. And I like Gray and Brian, actually. They all seem so relaxed around each other and like a really good group of people to be friends with. And, of course, I thought Haylee's response was hilarious when she immediately wanted to go try to set shit on fire. (who wouldnt!?)

Not a crappy chapter at all, so I don't know what you're apologizing for! Seriously, though; this story is super awesome and I am so excited that I managed to stumble upon this! I really can't wait to see where you take this, because I already love all of the details and thought that you've put into it so far! I think this is honestly my favorite story on my subscriptions list right now! :D

OH! I just thought you might want to consider putting something about Zacky somewhere in the summary or cover or something. Obviously saying he's her husband that she forgot would ruin that whole surprise -- duh! -- but I know that I started reading this thinking it was going to be a Matt or Bri fic. Which was obviously no problem, because I totally still read it, right? Imagine my excitement when all of a sudden it looks like it's going to be a Zacky story!

And on the suggestions note; I don't know how accurate you wanted to be with the Latin translations, but just in case you wanted them to be more accurate, you should probably switch the commands into the imperative form... since, you know, they're commands. Latin's weird like that; its the only thing I learned taking it for two years back in high school. So, 'venio' actually means 'i come,' so if you wanted 'come!' then 'veni.' is actually what you'd want to use. And then... I think by 'seqour' you actually meant 'sequor', which, again, isn't the conjugation you want. I think you'd want 'sequere' for 'follow!'

@ girlthata7xknows
You shall find out ^_^ as well as powers and abilities and such :3

Ohh, I want to know more about her family. And damn, it would awesome to have super powers :D