Be Not Afraid to Love Me - Comments

I’m here as the new host for ‘Another Song Contest’.

You definitely created a really cute and hilarious dynamic between Micah and Stryker. I found myself chuckling at a lot of their interactions because you could just feel years and years of familiarity and friendship between the two. Then there was this soft, creeping sensation of a newfound love blossoming between them, which also amplified the gentleness of the moment. It was really quite funny how even in Stryker’s biggest revelation and this earth moving moment between them, they still picked on each other. I feel like this definitely embodied their personalities and relationship well.

However, I’m not… sure how I feel about the whole Micah taking advantage of Stryker when he was drunk? That moment where Micah honestly worried that Stryker did remember last night’s events and then that line where he stalked Stryker down because he wanted him? It kind of puts me off from Micah as a character because it implies that he took advantage of a less-than-sober Stryker for selfish reasons. I wouldn’t exactly be happy if my best friend told me, more or less, that they had blatantly took advantage of me in a really inebriated state. There’s also an implication that Micah’s done it more than once, which was kinda ‘meh’ to me.

As for concrit, I think you used the descriptor ‘[adjective] male’ too much. It stands out a lot to me as a reader because I’m reading it all in one go. You also used “elder/younger [male]” a lot. The more you referred to Micah as ‘the elder’ or Stryker as ‘the younger’, the more it started to stand out and distract me a lot. It really breaks the flow because it’s very repetitive. So I would definitely recommend rereading it and possibly using different adjectives to differentiate.

Other than that, this was a cute one-shot and I think you did well on writing it as a stand-alone. Good job.

@ Don'tFearTheReaper
AH! Just realized the name is Styles or Stiles or something like that. Totes not Stryker. Congrats on 2 unique names in this story. I'm always searching for cool names. Well, I love your humor, I've told you 500 times or so. lol You can comment backwards. I don't mind. lol =)

@ A. J.
This was an original fiction. And I don't necessarily know of a fandom with these names. Hmm.... Anyway, I suppose I add comedic relief for my sanity. I can't get through something so serious without making a quip about it. I didn't really want to create drama with these two, because they are obviously meant to be together. I wanted this to be an easy transition for them. (I kinda comment backward from how you comment; sorry, I just realized this.) Again, thank you for the comment. They seriously make me smile like an idiot.

Ah, Stryker recognized the scent! Micah was so funny when he tried to wake him up. I love how you inject humor and certain one-liners in your story to keep it light when a character gets too close to feeling something they're unsure of. I'm glad you didn't create drama between the two. Like Stryker denying being gay and them arguing etc. I like how it wrapped up and both being mature and going with it. Somewhat mature... they're so funny. Fairy! lol I'm not sure Is this a fanfic, as I've heard the name Stryker before. But I don't know where or when. I read it as an original and it's fantastic as I'm sure the fans of this fandom, if it is a fanfic, would love it too. Kudos *applauds*