What Melts Ice - Comments

@ house of cards.
Thank you very much! So happy you're enjoying!

I'm also here as a judge for the Magazine contest!

I love that you have this air of mystery right from the beginning. Who is this person and why is he being sentenced? I love stories that start off with questions and slowly answer them throughout so I'm really looking forward to seeing how you take that forward as you continue. I'm also looking forward to seeing whether a relationship blossoms between the nurse and Will! Winter romances are always adorable so I hope that they will end up getting together!

Honestly, I think the thing that I like about this the most is that it seems to be set way back, or at least that's what I'm getting from the dialogue. It gives me this vivid picture of something almost like the wintry setting of The Muppet's Christmas Carol. I'm a stickler for fiction that is set in historical times, so I really enjoyed that aspect of it!

All in all, definitely not a bad piece. I'm looking forward to seeing where you take it!

@ castiel's vessel
Thank you very much for enjoying my piece! I knew the layout was a rough one. I had a lot of trouble making it and even with this one I wasn't sure how it will go, but I will definitely change it immediately. Thank you again!

Hello, from the Magazine's contest!

The first thing I have to say is that the content body is hard to read. If you want to keep the picture then I'd suggest having it as a banner or something and having the text underneath because having text across a picture like that normally doesn't go well, especially when the text is white and the picture has a lot of white in too. But I'll default the layout in order to read.

The first thing I wonder is what his crime was. It's obviously bad - or at least bad in their eyes - and I am really interested in how terrible it could be but him still be made to work around children. It's interesting to say the least.

I'm also interested to how this will progress as it's clearly unfinished with these two chapters and prologue. It's got an interesting idea and I like how the young nurse blushed at catching Will's eye. It's cute and almost naive in a sense, as if she's not accustomed with men. It was sad that the children couldn't play in the snow and I found that contrasting the picture was a good move - instead of a happy child playing in snow, you have sad children looking at the snow and wishing to play in it. I like that.

This was a nice, cute piece from what's up so far. Other than the layout, nothing was off about it and the idea seems quite interesting as well, especially with the thought of where this could end up going. I really liked reading this.

@ Ladyfiaran
I'm glad you like it! Will definitely update soon!

This is a very interesting idea for a story, I don't think I've seen one like this before. I'd like to read more