August 29th, 2016 at 05:25pm
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With the palette and the story itself, you managed to bring a whole new meaning to the phrase being together. I think you gave the reader a sense of awareness, in a way, towards the idea of love, commitment and toxin all in one.
I envy how smooth you make these small chapters sound with very little words. You have the idea of sending the readers much more than they bargained for with your fantastic descriptions and effortless writing.
The first chapter made me very curious because I don’t think I’ve read anything similar to this masterpiece. It’s fresh~ I could tell you wrote this near your heart. This is going to be hard to explain but by reading this, I knew you were writing the story through your heart opposed to something formed from your brain.
The second chapter gave me this wave of pure sorrow. I felt so bad for her. It's as simple as a couple hundred words, yet the emotion you've written could fill pages worth of words. I love your writing greatly.
But he never left. This is a killer line. I think this sentence summarizes the entire story almost too perfectly.
The last sentences of each chapter really sets the guy’s mood, and somehow makes the reader open more to him despite all the horrible things he's done. I love how you make it the last thing to read as well because it makes me weak. But he loved her. Really, he did. This one is my favorite!
I really hate how she falls back for him but I totally see why she does. You've written about both the bad and good he does to her. And she's experienced both yet she can't come to her senses. I really enjoyed how well you written these raw emotions.
With the short chapters and your skillful way of putting words together this almost reads like a long poem, and it has a lovely flow. I feel so much for this character, because you do such an amazing job of conveying all her feelings. Her fear of him, her love for him, her wanting not to love him but being unable to resist.
I especially like the line about her trying to go limp and drag like dead weight, but he still doesn't let go and leave her behind. There's something very real and raw to this story and I love it. Not that that's surprising, since I pretty much love everything you write.