The Empty Night of Unhealed Scars - Comments

@ Airi.
Thank you for your review. And thanks for pointing out the paragraph spacing to me. On my word processor the paragraphs were spaced, so that's quite weird. And yes I do agree the title is a bit irrelevant. I added the title very early in the process so that's probably what threw it off, a bad habit I often do. The Empty Night is refering to New Year's eve and how the school was supposively empty, and Unhealed Scars refers to how she was in love with the unnamed boy who had a girlfriend, and at the end the scars have become healed, if that's not confusing. Anyways, both you and
@ Doe. Thank you for your time and reviewing on this entry

Hello, my name is Brittany and I am one of the judges for the Magazine's Winter Wonders contest.

Before I even began reading I'd like to note how hard this is going to be for most people to read. Mibba likes to encourage a double space format, which is where you add a space in between paragraphs. It gives the eyes a rest and helps so that the words don't all jumble together. I'm thankful that you didn't go with a black font because then this would be nearly impossible for me to read.

While reading I was wondering where this story was going to take me. When Teagan was talking about the experiences in the school I was sort of thinking paranormal, I mean who knows? And then there he was, the guy that Teagan loved most, totally melted my heart.

Spending the beginning of a year with someone you love is just one of the best ways to spend your time, something you can always look back on. It was really short and sweet, and I really enjoyed it.

Hey there~ I'm here as a judge for the Magazine's Winter Wonders contest.

Now, one thing I noticed in the story right away was the lack of double spacing in-between the paragraphs. It really threw me off when I first looked at the story. The thing is, with sites like Mibba, it can be very hard on a reader's eyes when a story is single spaced like this one is. Speaking as someone with relatively bad eyesight, it was fairly hard for me to read the story and for me to stay focused on it. Whenever I would need to look away from the story for any reason, I would easily lose my place because there really wasn't any indicators of the paragraphs separating. My advice for the story would be to utilize the double spaced paragraphs to make the story a little bit easier for someone to read.

Putting that aside, I do think your story was a good read. It was kind of sweet in a way and it was a very pleasant read. The story had me smiling by the end of it, I always enjoy a good happy ending every now and again. ^^ You did well on conveying Teagan's feelings and the things she was thinking as she made her way around the school. But after having read the story, I'm a bit confused by the title of the story since I'm not too sure of how it connects to the story itself. But that's just a small thing I'm probably being a bit too nitpicky about. ^^ I also did notice a few instances where you would confuse where/were/wear. It's a pretty common mistake, a lot of people confuse things like that. It's easy for people to be tripped up by similar words like that, but I would recommend brushing up on the words to prevent the same confusion in future stories.

Overall, I did like your story. It was a very short and sweet story, very to the point if I do say. And that is what I liked about your story, I did like how short and to the point it was. When done right, those stories can make for some very good reads and I feel like you were able to hit that very well with this story. You did well on the store, very nice job on it.