January 17th, 2014 at 09:12pm
First, thanks for deds.
Second. HOLY MOLY. THAT WAS PERFECT.
Sad and utterly beautiful too.
I loved the mix of first and second person, though I found it quite difficult to adjust at the start. I love the softer side you've given Oli, and the reason why is so clear in the last paragraph. (Which was also so sad.)
I loved the story, it was beautiful.
I'm probably repeating myself. You've made me lose my words.
Oh god. Absolutely stunning!
I choked when I got to, "I'm your mess though, right?" and then you see, "Of course, Oli." The "of course" killed me forty-five times over. Oh my goodness. It's just so great and sweet and agggh.
Then we got to the garden. We got to the garden and then pain and of course, you have killed me yet again. The doctor's visit and everything, everything just tore me to pieces and it hurt so bad, it was just insane. Help me.
THE END. THE END JUST SLICED ME UP AND PUNCHED ME IN THE GUT AND SLAPPED ME AROUND AND WHYYYY. The final paragraph, it was so sweet and he wants to remember, he wants to remember and it's so much to handle, I need a moment. The last sentence, you know the drill. It killed me.
You murdered me about fifty times through the course of this. It was a beautiful read. <3