Come and Go - Comments

wow wow I like this a lot
the way you structure your writing is really great and the way you develop your characters is just on point I love it
please write more hayliver because it is an amazing pairing and you are a fabulous writer!

This story didn't drag on at all, despite the somewhat above average word count for a oneshot. I adore that about it, really.

Anyway, I really like how you portrayed it as more than just meeting a stranger. It was a day at the fair, sure, but it was also as a result of their parties ditching them. That's how I knew it would involve a lot of fluff and funny moments. Despite the emphasis on Hayley being her cheery, carefree self and Oli as the awkward but charming one, I could definitely imagine this happening. I liked how you didn't overuse any "Britishisms" so each word that wasn't strictly American had an impact on me as a reader.

I'm also glad that Oli was the one who decided what they were going to do; poor little clueless thing though. When they got off the roller coaster, it was refreshing to know he didn't try to be all macho nacho man and say it was a lame ride. He was genuine, she was as well; everything about their day was so easygoing.

Then the part with the plushies. That right about there killed me. When they parted ways and the plushies and and and---I have no words. I think I may need two glasses of water---one for how sweet & fluffy this was, and the second for the anticipation of Oli calling Hayley.

In short, you're fabulous and this story is as well. I'm honored to be a part of the deds.

This was stellar! My favourite parts were the ones where Oli arrived at the fair all the way to when Oli left the fair. Like seriously, it's just amazing.
As Rianne already pointed out, your characterization is absolutely stunning - I especially love how they don't just have one emotion, rather a whole heap.

Not one part of this was boring, I read it all in one hit and just kept scrollin'. Props to you for that. (I usually take a break somewhere whoops.)
I just feel like going back and reliving this perfect day, you know?

THIS. WAS. PERFECT.

Okay, first I wanna say that my cheeks hurt. You know why? Because your wonderful fic got me smiling the whole damn time. I couldn't handle how adorable and amazing this was. And the fact that this was really long just makes it even better. From the moment on the ferris wheel to when they said goodbye, it was all perfect. Just freakin' perfect.

I loved the way you characterized them. I loved how Oli was all grumpy and pissed off at Lee while Hayley was so cheerful and positive even though Jeremy and Taylor ditched her. Of course, Oli didn't stay mad for long because let's be honest, when it comes to Hayley's loveliness, it's seriously impossible to stay grumpy and Oli realized that in the end. I was completely in love with how they gradually started to fall for each other the more they hung out. The little details you did to show that just omg. Like when she told him she liked his face when he smiled and that he shouldn't cover it. SO HE PUTS HIS HAND DOWN BECAUSE SHE LIKES HIS SMILE. SQUEEE.

And them teasing each other just made me giggle so damn much. I'm so glad nobody's around because Oli's whole stubborness about the cotton candy/candy floss thing was the funniest and cutest thing ever. Oh, and don't get me started on the sparklers part. When Hayley joked about leaving AND HE TOOK IT SERIOUSLY AND SUDDENLY BECAME ALL BUMMED OUT.

"I'm having too much fun to just leave." Shit, just like Oli, I couldn't help but smile. Ugh, my cheeks are aching, girl. Why are you making me smile so much. But don't stop because you're fantabulous okay I don't mind if my cheeks are hurting this is all worth it. AND WHEN HE PUTS THE SNAKE OVER HER SHOULDERS. Goddammit, that made me squeal again, stop being so sweet, Oli. Wait, don't stop. AND SHE DECIDES TO NAME HER SNAKE SYKES. Hayley, I swear, my heart is melting.

Then he runs into Lee and tells Lee how he didn't mind being alone at all because he had Hayley. Sappy Oli is the best. You're the best. Ugh, and then in his thoughts, he almost said cotton candy. Once again, my smile got wider and my cheeks were suffering.

He narrows his eyes at his best friend, flicking him in the forehead. Hayley is more than hot. She is funny, she is sweet, she smells like too much vanilla and she laughs too loud and she is afraid of heights depending on the situation. She likes to tease and she doesn't mind getting teased back and she gives her number to awkward British boys, so yeah, Hayley is more than hot.

MY FAVORITE. JUST A PERFECT WAY TO SEE HAYLEY THROUGH OLI'S EYES.

Btw, Taylor's text message? Just. So. Great. Oh, Taylor. I love Taylor so much.

I just wanna say that this was worth the wait and it was absolutely perfect just like I predicted.
YOU HAVE MADE YOUR HAYLIVER MOMMA PROUD. I loved it. You, darling, are amazing.