The Sweetest Addiction - Comments

This is a very realistic and intriguing plot.I like how you were able to go outside the common to integrate these character overcoming their addiction through religious aspects. It was bold and unique, since a lot of people are not used to writing or reading about God, because not everybody believes in Him. The characters seem diverse with unique personalities that were descried with details. I could easily analyzed that Winter might be the one that always likes to have more fun than Lilly, and she gets more involved with men that Lilly does.

Lilly is a good friend, trying to protect Winter in making the same romantic errors that destroys her in a way. This story has a lot of potential, because it expresses an addiction that is common in society. Not only the addiction as a sickness is perceived, but also the inspiration it holds to overcome it. I like that Brother Ken doesn't want to obligate these girls to pursue God, his faith in order to prevail in their addiction.

The way Jonathan took the girls to his home is contradictory to the way Brother Ken expresses how this program is voluntarily. When the girls are drunk, and this stranger comes and picks them all, gives a sense of confusion as to think they are being kidnapped in a way. I got a little lost in that part, but I was able to get back on track further into the chapters.

So far, this is a good piece.

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First off, the title of the story is amazing. It had me intrigued at once I started reading. Also, the summary is kind of...cool. The word kryptonite had me really attracted haha. Really reminded me of Superman XD
The idea of the story is highly original and I liked how you brought out the characters, especially Winter. I absolutely loved her thought process, especailly when she wanted to free herself and find salvation but the alcomhol wouldn't let her. Wonderfully done.
I wasn't expecting the part of AA being included, so you caught me off guard there. I thought it would be something along the lines of Winter and Lily being treated through counselling. But really, brilliant. Also, I'm glad you're writing on overcoming addiction. I don't think the topis has ever been brought up in a story before. So do continue this, I'll tag along! Good luck and thank you!

On a side note, your layout is really so pretty

This is a wonderful story so far. I'm always interested in people's perceptions on treatment and overcoming addiction. I find Winter to be an incredibly strong character. It takes a person with a lot of pride(I can't really think of the right word) to even being on the street asking for money. I can't wait to see where the story continues.

So the idea of an addict overcoming their addiction through God is intriguing to me. In the beginning of the first chapter, itseemed to bounce everywhere. From the AA meeting to the girls' history with each other. Regardless of that, I liked this because you could see the bond between the girls (though I personally do not believe hou can be addicted to weed). I findthis to be pretty unique amongst the constant teenage romances out there and I like that. It was a rreally good read (:

So the idea of an addict overcoming their addiction through God is intriguing to me. In the beginning of the first chapter, itseemed to bounce everywhere. From the AA meeting to the girls' history with each other. Regardless of that, I liked this because you could see the bond between the girls (though I personally do not believe hou can be addicted to weed). I findthis to be pretty unique amongst the constant teenage romances out there and I like that. It was a rreally good read (:

Wow, this is really good. You really get addiction right on the nose. The guilt, but still needing to use it. My dad's an alcoholic (not as bad as Winter's dad anymore), so I get this. It's such an emotional story. They're not making good choices, but their family and their past explains it all. It's so sad. I hope Winter gets her salvation.