Things Will Never Be the Same - Comments

I'm here as a judge for the Magazine contest!

I like that you start the story with that saying because, like Lea, I believe it not to be true so that instantly made me akin to her as a character and a person and just brought me into the story more. I was absolutely heartbroken when I read about her fiancé dying, but you took such a horrible thing and twisted it into a more positive beginning of a new way of living and I love that. I'm a firm believer of everything having a silver lining and the silver lining on this story was just lovely. I like that she chose to do something that had been talked about for years. It sort of keeps the spirit alive and makes it seems as if he isn't gone, not really. I like that aspect of the story the most, I think.

All in all, lovely piece! No spelling or grammar issues immediately jumped out to me either. Great job!

I thought the way you started was very eye catching. I've never actually heard that saying before so it made me really interested in the story immediately. I also noticed that after mentioning her fiancée, Evgeni Birmaun, that there was an extra comma after his name. I just thought you might not have seen that. When you start talking about how it all changed on January 15th, I immediately got that sinking feeling because of your wonderful description. I love how you talk about how she deals with it and how Gabi enters the picture and just sort of talks to her. I love the ending message and I can only hope that Lea can continue to grow stronger from his passing. I loved this! Great job!