Pentimenti - Comments

Wow, to be quite frank I find it so difficult to read narratives that deal with angst or personal conquest only because they often times feel cliched and original and makes me want to roll my eyes because "who's life isn't difficult?" but then there are instances where I come across something that just...works. And this really does work. I appreciate the stream of word because it compels me in a way that visualizes the stream of thought that occurs. It was a compelling choice of stylistic perspective. It's a process you take us through and rather than tell, you show which I commend you for. Great Job.

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This is beautiful, I felt the pain drifting out from the words on the screen, the confusion, the bitterness, the anger. I do agree with the run on sentences, but it almost, I may be wrong, felt right. In times like those, what is the significance of a perfectly written sentence? The sentence runs on, like a rambling mind as it tries to process what happened, tries to remember the subtle details of, pain. The story felt like one giant memory, and that I was sitting in some dark hole, hearing this lowly voice of a traveller who had gone far beyond pain. The imagery, the descriptions, the characters, the happenings, such fluidity (if the sentences are ignored), again I say beautiful. Pouring out a bleeding heart on to a page is never easy, and I commend you for that.

Hello,

This is beautiful, I felt the pain drifting out from the words on the screen, the confusion, the bitterness, the anger. I do agree with the run on sentences, but it almost, I may be wrong, felt right. In times like those, what is the significance of a perfectly written sentence? The sentence runs on, like a rambling mind as it tries to process what happened, tries to remember the subtle details of, pain. The story felt like one giant memory, and that I was sitting in some dark hole, hearing this lowly voice of a traveller who had gone far beyond pain. The imagery, the descriptions, the characters, the happenings, such fluidity (if the sentences are ignored), again I say beautiful. Pouring out a bleeding heart on to a page is never easy, and I commend you for that.