Oh, man, at first I thought Jack was the abuser. Kinda gave me a scare there, not gonna lie. Like JulieCHEE said, you do go back and forth between first and third quite a few times, and I found that a little confusing at first. I also didn't get understand how Jack knew to wait on the porch. Did he just sort of expect it, or did Alex manage to slip in a quick call before he left? I gotta comment on how cute Jack was to Alex, like, I live for cute things and speeches and gestures, you don't even understand. I got a little choked up myself when he started crying. Part of me thinks that maybe, even though Jack was his "breath of fresh air," he kept going back home because he knew that he'd get hurt. Not that he wanted to, but he knew that Jack would care for him... I don't wanna say more, but I can't think of any other word to use... maybe he knew that Jack would baby him, or care for him in a different way than he would if he wasn't hurt, if that makes sense? I don't know, maybe I'm just putting too much thought into it. If there's any one thing I learned from public school English teachers, it's to look into things too much. But I digress. To put everything simply, the beginning hurt me but the ending was so fluffy that it made up for the initial pain. Very good one-shot!
December 14th, 2014 at 04:20am