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  • silent hearts.

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    Wow. You've really got a good thing going here, man. Your prologue is fantastic; it takes care of a majority of the exposition without shoving too much information down the readers' throats. The balance of comedy and stands you have going on is very well done. I really appreciate how your main female lead, although she could be part of the model stereotype or that of being related to a famous person, is very independent and real. She has the same emotions and reactions that any other person might have in the stressful situations she experiences, which is really important to I think fan fiction especially. This is great work and I can't wait to see the conclusion!
    October 3rd, 2014 at 04:05am
  • Alex Moore.

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    Hey! Comment swap: I love the way it starts. The flashback of when they met and what she was like when they did. I instantly feel connected with the main character, not even knowing her name. Wow he is breaking up at a party? That is rough..

    Oh and chapter two, great to find out she was writing this in her journal. I like people who write obviously haha. Oh and she is a model right now? Amazing.

    And Tyra Banks, Yeah I understand the goodie bag haha. I really like this story. Keep it up and I will read more!
    July 12th, 2014 at 08:00pm
  • Phenax

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    I love Sean. <3 This chapter was really good!!! :) I love it. Bunches.
    April 28th, 2014 at 06:09am
  • LiacideXIII

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    I really love how you can take the character emotions and character development and make them so amazing and easy to relate to.
    I really have missed this one and I can't wait for more.
    April 27th, 2014 at 12:05am
  • Charlotte91

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    I've just discovered this story and I love it the character development is great :)
    April 24th, 2014 at 04:19pm
  • TrustMyRage

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    This story is so beautiful I love the relationship between characters and it is very well written!!!
    April 24th, 2014 at 07:38am
  • Marah Elaine

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    Hello tear-jerk!! Love it, love it, love it! <3 Can't wait to read more!
    April 23rd, 2014 at 10:19pm
  • IWillMakeYouScream

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    Damn it, now I wanna cry with them :'( that was an amazing chappy.... just hurry with the update :D
    April 23rd, 2014 at 08:06pm
  • Marah Elaine

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    As always, each chapter gets better and better and the story is so fun to read, AND believable! If I didn't know any better, I would say that this actually happened! I am so in love with this story and I look forward to the next update!!!
    April 8th, 2014 at 10:59pm
  • SuckerInA3Piece

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    That last chapter was the most amazing thing I've ever read. I was quite literally tearing up through the entire thing with a ridiculous grin on my face. so perfect.
    April 6th, 2014 at 12:22am
  • SaraHorlyk

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    So, I started reading this story a few hours ago, and girl? I freaking love it! - That's really all I have to say. But pretty please, please update it again soon! :)
    April 5th, 2014 at 11:41pm
  • dirtonyournewshoes

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    This was the best chapter of anything I have read in a long, long time, oh my goodness. I am at a loss for words. It was sweet, it was heartbreaking, it made me tear up a bit, not gonna lie. This is so so so good, I love it so much!! You are such a fantastic writer!!
    April 3rd, 2014 at 05:39pm
  • LiacideXIII

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    Well that that pulled on my heartstrings in more than one way.
    That was so well written that it had me in tears.
    Do you know how much of a fantastic writer you are?
    Keep up the good work and I hope you update more often!
    April 3rd, 2014 at 10:58am
  • IWillMakeYouScream

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    I knew the bad part was coming but it led to something amazing, she let him tear down his wall and get in again. You pulled it off perfectly, that was just...it's beyond words how good you are :D thanks, keep up the good work and update now!
    April 3rd, 2014 at 06:23am
  • kiwi_piwi

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    Amazing chapter - so much emotion!!! Can't wait for the next update!
    April 3rd, 2014 at 03:44am
  • LiacideXIII

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    Something tells me that the next chapter is gonna have me bawling my eyes out.
    Can't wait to read it though.
    :3
    March 27th, 2014 at 06:34am
  • Marah Elaine

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    Ahhh! It just keeps getting better and better!! I am so afraid that her parents have been in the car accident! :( I firmly believe that Norman and Kenz need to be a couple again, IMMEDIATELY. They are way too cute together and seem to be good for one another. So excited for the update, can't wait to read more!
    March 23rd, 2014 at 07:49am
  • IWillMakeYouScream

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    Oh s***, wtf happened? I can guess what, but right as they were getting comfy and possibly closer to getting back together? That ain't right....maybe this accident will pull them closer together
    March 21st, 2014 at 07:07pm
  • kiwi_piwi

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    "It doesn't matter, you shouldn't have to." And my heart melted. I can't wait for the next chapter!
    March 21st, 2014 at 07:04pm
  • SuckerInA3Piece

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    I really really really hope he wins her heart again and they aren't left miserable and sad. I don't think you understand how giddy I get whenever I see an update :)
    March 21st, 2014 at 06:31pm