February 20th, 2014 at 09:06pm
Im absolutely hooked! The beginning reminds me of an adult version of Mortal instruments. Sexy, mysterious guy at the club, immediate attraction,etc
I also really like Anna right off the bat. She seems relateable. A little whory, but what girl isn't at the club :P I think your voice speaks great through her.
It sounds like its going to be a supernatural story(?), which can get boring if the man character is too over the top. Anna doesn't seem that way. I can see my self reading her mannerisms/replies and think "Ya I would do this","Ya this would happen in real life." Which is really hard when having a female character ( cus we're all chicken IRL LOL) Anyway great job. I can't wait to find out what sexy Ian is! And why he wants Anna.
@Tiny_Dance04
I am so happy you are hooked! To be honest, I just started typing and let my mind wonder and this is the result! I don't even know for sure what is exactly going to come next in the story, but I have a few crazy ideas brewing! I am hoping to start chapter two this weekend and hoefully finish it by Sunday or so.