The Ivy Club - Comments

This was my favourite story on mibba :( Glad it's back!

Hehehe ;) Like always, I loved the chapter. The parts with Chanyeol were super cute and I like the way Ren is thinking! ^^

aw thank you so much! i love you too! your story makes me feel so happy and it's perfect the way i see it. this chapter really did clear things up for me and I loved it, she may be like that but I understand her. Other than that the part where they were all hugging her was so funny and cute and I loved the part when Yifan said ( "Sorry kiddo," a short lived response, "I can't do anything else. Baekhyun's a faggot. I don't touch faggots." ) Hahah!! You're awesome and executed the fight scene well I could actually ENVISION it. Thanks for creating such an epic story, i'm looking forward to more :)

@ forget you.
you're the qt'est thing ever & i'll b working on updating this weekend!

come baaaack.

And I just noticed that you thanked me for my comments. Well thank you for writing such an intriguing story that I can't lose interest in!

And I just noticed that you thanked me for my comments. Well thank you for writing such an intriguing story that I can't lose interest in!

Oh my God. I haven't been online in days and I come back and find this. I absolutely loved her paper. It was very easy to relate to, in a way. you wrote it so beautifully. There are so many lines in this particular chapter that capture my heart. This is so deep. I love this story, keep this up.

@ park yoochun
Awesome! Cant wait :)

@ jeon jungkook;
it'll make sense in the next chap when i write from ren's pov c:!

Honestly this chapter kind of confused me but I still enjoyed it. I absolutely love the way you write it sucks me in and that's really admirable.

I. Love. This. Story. There's absolutely nothing imperfect about it. Please update as soon as possible. I need to know what happens!

I. Love. This. Story. There's absolutely nothing imperfect about it. Please update as soon as possible. I need to know what happens!

I have never had many favorite stories on mibba before but this is one of the very few and I can't wait for more updates.

I have never had many favorite stories on mibba before but this is one of the very few and I can't wait for more updates.

If that was not the greatest intro + hook to a story I don’t know what is!

The first chapter is amazing. I like how you introduced each of the girls in a list form rather than throwing all of them at the reader + expecting us to catch on. I can’t get over your descriptions of the girls. I always read stories about a gang/group of guys, and this is seriously refreshing to read. I already hate and love Mi Ran and same with Ren, except I don’t dislike her at all.

The second chapter was filled with some sass ah, I am a sucker for student/teacher. Which I think this is going to be, judging from what I have read so far? I have fallen in love with your writing. I’m having trouble focusing on the plot because you keep writing drool worthy sentences like uptight and classy was just the way for them to go about their business. but so far I enjoy the speed of everything. It’s fast enough to keep me interested but slow enough to not confuse me.

The third, I CANNOT TAKE CHANYEOL. HIS COMMENT ABOUT MI RAN BEING DISEASE-RIDDEN it was so comical the way EXO was trying to call dibs. Of course Chanyeol just begins to walk up to her, like fuck you guys I haven’t read a sex scene in a while and you are very good at it I like you wrote about Chanyeol’s reactions + thoughts rather than Ren’s. And their personalities are so interesting I like how they fuck in the bathroom + then talk about Princeton Also, I am not sure if I missed when all of EXO was arriving to Hansang High, but in the beginning of this chapter you state it’s the 4th day of classes, yet at the end of the chapter Ren tells Chanyeol it would be a shame if he was late on his first day? Sorry if they arrived on the 4th day of the school year, I just wanted to let you know if they were supposed to have arrived on the first

“ but I don't like being pinned against the wall. I'm assuming you do?" I am in love with Chanyeol’s character tbh. And when he said he was honored to have taken her anal virginity out of all the ways I have seen him characterized, this version of him is my favorite. Hm, by the end I have gotten a slightly better understanding of the both of them. The plot is pretty unique. I feel both of them are used to be impersonal whores, and now they’re just two impersonal whores who understand each other + are amazingly getting along I don’t mean that in an offense way! That’s just how I take it. I like it though, they seem very laid back about everything.

It's like the Asian Hitler in a tight shirt with fake breasts, a new nose job, Angelina Jolie lips and a taunt ass. My thoughts exactly tbh that sentence made me laugh so hard I was a coughing mess Is there going to be a hardcore rivalry?? Damn, well this is a very different side of Chanyeol! I like everything about this

I know I said I would be giving constructive critisim but there is not a single thing I could constructively critique you on I am so subbing to this omg I can’t wait to see what happens between everyone!

I actually like this, although it isn't usually my thing, but your writing style is awesome and it kind of pulls the reader in... your description was great, it all flowed well and the characters are awesome :)

Here are basically my thoughts the entire time I was reading this.

Chapter 1

I am already wondering what kind of little clique this is going to be. Are they going to be the mean girls who where the nice clothes and are fake nice to everyone or are they going to be the mean girls who knock people into lockers and suck everyone's dick behind the bleachers after school? Only time will tell.

So Choi is the head bitch in charge it looks like. I have a feeling she is going to be a force to be reckoned with, even if she can't run in her nude pumps. I can't believe she is the tallest one. 5'4" isn't that tall but these short girls in heels run the world.

Lei seems like she is going to be an angry one. Children of divorces usually harbor a lot of guilt, which she could easily take out on others. She can't help it, though. It's not her fault. Okay, I think I actually like her. She seems like she has a good heart, even though she has gotten herself into a not-so-nice crowd. I'm wondering if she is just putting up a fake front to be popular or if she actually likes her friends.

So it looks Jade is the resident punching bag of the group. It seems like she's the one that gets all the shit from Choi, but who gives a fuck because it'll just make her stronger in the end. Betches.

Well, well, well, Amy is sleeping with the son of her host family. I am so not surprised. More power to you, girlfriend. You gotta do what you gotta do.

Gen is, I think, going to be the most unique one of the group. It's obvious she doesn't give a fuck based on her blue hair and just overall stance of not giving a fuck. I think I'm going to like this one.

Zan. Poor, poor, Zan. Ah, the joys of being the twin of the head bitch in charge. It's not a glorious position, but someone has to do it. Well, she has to do it since they were in the womb together. Poor girl.

Chiyo seems like she is going to be the ditz of the group or something. She just seems like she's not the brightest crayon in the box. Sharpest tool in the shed. She got a 4 on her ACT.

Oh my gosh, the other seven are just followers I cannot even handle it. Their names just really don't even matter at this point. Gtfo.

Ah, senior year. I have a feeling the girls are going to give this year a run for its money. Fuck bitches and get money. I hope there are some awesome high school parties, insane petty drama and maybe, definitely some underage drinking and hook ups. Who really knows.

Norika has the exact same idea as I do. Go big or go home. They have to get crunk on their senior year or what's the point of running the school? Nothing is my point.

Damn, Ren is already getting snapped at and senior year just started 2.5 seconds ago. Hell no. Is this bitch about to get replaced already?

I love how Mi Ran gives zero fucks and is already putting everyone in their place. This bitch is seriously hilarious. She doesn't take shit from anyone. Ever.

Okay, just the mention of Park Chanyeol makes me think that something is going to go wrong and Mi Ran is going to get VERY pissed off about someone sleeping with her "close childhood friend". Someone is going to get their tits chopped off by an angry woman.

All I can say is that I cannot wait for the drama.

Chapter 2

Well, hello, here are the boys! I'm wondering if their little group is going to be hilariously sassy like the girls, but I'm not sure if one story could take that much sass without literally exploding or something.

"As far as the seniors go, the majority have that 'Don't give a shit' vibe"' That is exactly what I was talking about! Someone is going to not give a shit too much so get ready for the drama and hold onto your tits.

Chapter 3

Delight of the new school year? They won't be thinking that when Choi is stealing their lunches and throwing them into their lockers. Just kidding, but they better get ready for all of the drama that goes along with being in high school.

Okay Park Chanyeol is clearly going to be of interest to many of the girls, and I'm thinking he is going to like it. What a ladies man.

Baekhyun just called Choi a hottie in front of Park? Doesn't he know that Choi is the HBIC? You don't fuck with the HBIC. Especially when it's around her childhood friend. Oh no, honey.

OH MY GOSH I CANNOT BELIEVE HE JUST CALLED HER DISEASE RIDDEN THAT IS HILARIOUS.

Oh, what, what, what. No. Park did not just go there. He did not. Doesn't he know what happens when you ogle the best friend of your former (or possibly current?) booty call and childhood best friend. Just no. Oh no. He is going to be a royal shit starter this one. Put your eyes back in your head before you get yourself and Lei in trouble.

AND BOYS DON'T YOU KNOW YOU CANNOT CALL DIBS ON THE GIRL THAT PARK JUST OGLED FROM ACROSS THE ROOM. They all just need to get on the same page and fast because hello this is not going to work for everyone. On a serious note, they are cracking me up over here.

Of course Park takes the initiative to actually introduce himself. That is my man right there. Just get up and go for it instead of wasting precious time calling dibs on babes from across the room.

WHAT WHAT WHAT WHAT WHAT WHAT THAT WAS FAST I LOVE IT. Oh my gosh so much caps lock but what is even going on right now. Looks like they decided to start their senior year sooner rather than later hello.

Chapter 4

Wait, what is going on with Lei's mom ): That is just sad. I'm glad Lei had the courage to stand up for herself and her mother though. Someone needed to do it because that guy is a total prick. I feel so bad for her on a real level though because that is some tough shit to go through.

Okay, I have a feeling this teacher thing is going to turn into some serious shit. Like some serious shit. It may seem innocent right now but we saw last chapter how quickly this shit can escalate. Wait, friendship? How much of that do I actually buy? None of it, Lei. You can I both know that's not the truth!

Chanyeol is being so sweet to her I cannot take it. He is such a doll. When boys are caring it makes my heart thud and he is just tending to her wounds like a little angel.

As you can tell I basically really loved this story! I don't think I can say more than I've already said, but this is absolutely fantastic!

I don't know how that comment ended up being 1,200 words but it did

Layout & Summary
For some reason the layout reminds me of tumblr. XD I don't know why, but at the same time I'm really attracted to it.

As for the summary, wow. It really hooked me in and I want some back story and what it means now that Chanyeol saw the girl and the teacher embrace.

Chapter I
Fourteen is a large number for a clique. I love the way you do kind of like a roll call of some of the girls and let us know a bit of who they are and what they look like.

Also, despite there being so many characters you made in able for each of them to have their own individual personalities. Which I find to be very impressive.

Chapter II
The chapter is shorter, but at the same time I was able to vividly see how the scene was taking place and all are characters are very evident and they all show through. I really love that and I love your writing style.

There really isn't much I can critic on besides just a minor worry of how all of these characters are going to remain relevant and as strong as they are now as the story continues to progress. Yet, at the same time since you are a strong writer, that might not be an issue for you.

So, yeah. I really like this and I feel like people who aren't a fan of EXO or even fanfiction can really enjoy this.

THE TITLE OF CHAPTER 3 IS LITERALLY THE TITLE OF MY LIFE. Ren is also living my dream, jesus. I was literally panting during this scene like wow. I did think it was cute though how she's like fucking him but she's also like "Yes this is nice, but by the way I'm really smart and am going to college okay"