March 12th, 2014 at 06:58pm
:c Oh ouch, that first sentence. I would have slapped a guy fareal.
to hard smacks and they connected with the males heads.
I think that should be two.
All in good jest or not, they would find pranks all over the house waiting for them due to their mouth. I thought this was pretty cute and funny. I bet Yumi facepalms a lot... a lot, a lot.
That's when she goes and cooks a delicious dinner for one, but doesn't let them eat. >v>
Grammar/Spell Check/Improvements: It looks okay.
Opening: o.o Oh wow… that opening… He'd be sleeping outside for a month if that was me. -_- Oh my gosh, this son's even worse.
Ending: Ah, I don't know how Yumi does it. I would have gotten rid of them both. -_- Even if they were just playing around. That's so mean. v.v
Favorite Line: She vowed to have no more kids.
Other Thoughts: Well, this was unexpected. I surely was not expecting this kind of father-son relation… This was unique though, I've never read another book or story that has the husband talking about her wife's weight like that after having a kid.