I Got Your Picture, I'm Cumming With You - Comments

@ brxndneweyes
Okay(:

this is beautiful bless u for writing it

You did a really good job on this, I love it :)

AHH I LOVE IT!!!

AHH I LOVE IT!!!

@ micheledawnn
Sure I will! But reply to this so I remember to tomorrow because I'm tired. xo

@ alltimelesbians
OMG THANK YOU I THOUGHT IT WAS SO AWFUL AND RUSHED

aaaHHHH THAT WAS SO GREAT

@ brxndneweyes
http://www.mibba.com/Stories/Read/554285/Dear-Jack/ <--- There' s a "sequel" but you don't have to read it if you don't want to

@ micheledawnn
Sure! Link?

@ brxndneweyes
No, no you're fine. But I would like to get your opinion on a series of oneshots I'm starting. You don't have to read all of them (there's only 2 right now) but I'd like to get your opinion on te idea of it.

@ micheledawnn
I always worry I just sound like a stuck-up dick omg.

@ brxndneweyes
I totally get the POV change. I wanted all of it to be in 3rd, but for some reason, I always end up fucking it up. And meh, I couldn't think of a better way to do the time changes, so I guess I'll jut hve to put more thought into that next time. And I COMPLETELY get what you're saying about how much he drank. I was kinda iffy on that as well. But I've actually drank a close amount to that, so I don't know.

AND DONT FEEL BAD. I love it when people give me con-crit because it helps me improve my writing! Don't apologize(: as long as you're not a twat about it, then I love hearing people's opinions

@ micheledawnn
Well you did a good job if it's a squick for you!

My only pointers is for the POV change, I find that messy. idk, it wouldn't bother some, but generally it gets to me. There could've been cleaner transition for the pre-show part rather than saying *two hours earlier...* like... part of the description. "It was two hours before the show and..." etc. You did the watersports so well, my only pointer for that is the amount he drank, possibly too much. I would feel rather ill if I drank that in less than two hours never mind waiting to pee omfg.

This all sounds really horrible now that I've typed it but I offered and now I can't back out I APOLOGISE SO MUCH JUST HIT ME.

@ brxndneweyes
Con-crit would be great, yes! And I'm so happy you liked it! I tried doing my best considering I'm not ito Watersports AT ALL

YES YES YES THANKU. I loved the last line omfg.

Could I offer some con-crit? Nothing terrible, just a couple of things I noticed I'M SORRY I just wanna help.

But legit I love watersports so much and nobody's wrote any in a while so yay. <3

@ alltimelcw
HELL YEA

SHIT YES

sorry if you get like 6 comments from me on this story. my computer glitched out .___. loved this fic though lmao