From States Away - Comments

So, I just want to say that this actually didn't hurt me as bad as I thought it would.

And I absolutely love how this turned out. I know you were trying to go for fluffy, but in my opinion, I wouldn't want it any other way.
Yes, you read that right. The Hayliver Momma wouldn't want it any other way because this was all perfect.

Their argument was tense and I was so pulled into this story, like you don't even know. I love how Hayley calls him out on his bullshit. How she's tired of always fixing his problems and him only needing her when he's bored or when Hannah's not around. It shows how Oli is yet again a moron for not giving himself to her fully and how Hayley can't take it anymore and she doesn't want to be played with anymore. It was heartrenching, but amazing.

By the way, I love that Bust Magazine photoshoot. Hayley is so stunning.

As for the ending, I loved the conversation they had over the phone. It shows how despite what shit they went through, they still think of each other as friends and I'll admit, Oli made me laugh with the whole gypsy thing because I can totally see him saying something comical like that. The ending was beautiful. It wasn't the happily ever after, but it was hopeful and nice. It sets up that things will be okay in the end. Maybe not perfect, but they'll be alright and I love that.

“I need you. All of you. Now.” <--- Perfect last line. Just. Ugh. I love that line more than life itself.

Anyway, you've taken my breath away with another beautiful Hayliver. I enjoyed it a lot and as always, you did an amazing job and I love you.

This was so fabulous and so beautiful. I loved how they fought, how Hayley realized he was upset with himself for not putting Hannah first. How neither of them could even fix the relationships they had and so they just let them go away and they were all alone. And then Hayley calls him and he's there and you just know he's coming to see her. This might not have been the fluffy you thought it would be the first time, but it's better for not being. It's better for being just as it is right now.

reading this I felt like I was in the story with them, watching the whole thing happen or something
this is going to sound seriously disgusting but I felt like I was transported to a whole other world

your writing is seriously perfection and their conversation was so relatable and so something I could hear being said as well

usually I despise open endings but it was so fitting for this story and if there had been a definitive ending I don't think it would've turned out the way it did

making the rest of us look bad, one story at a time

That intro made my stomach and heart drop.

Your description is beautiful. Seriously. I can imagine the way the furniture's set out and how Oli's so blasé when he talks about. Dismissing.

Woah. What happened. What was so bad. Oh that's bad. Shit Oli, get it together. You're made for each other! Everyone thinks so!

HE LETS HER WALK AWAY. WHAT A FOOL. WHAT A COMPLETE FOOL.

I love how they're really cool talking to each other. We spent months apart but we still love and care for each other. No biggie. This is gorgeous, it really is. And I love this line from Oliver so much.
"I decided to spend a couple of weeks in the States traveling like a fucking gypsy."
That's brilliant.