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  • Jordypye

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    I am really liking this story so far! I've never had a long attention span but holy crap that first chapter so amazing! Where has this story been hiding?! Crazy
    April 17th, 2014 at 07:00am
  • Queen of the Clouds

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    Really missed reading this story! This chapter just made me hate Nathan even more. He just doesn't understand how to treat her at all Facepalm Only spotted the tiny typo of "I quietly pulled one of its drawer’s open" - doesn't need the apostrophe. Can't wait for another update and for her relationship to grow even more with Alec! Cute
    April 12th, 2014 at 01:53am
  • Vartokk

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    Nothing can describe how happy I was when I got the email that this story had been updated!! I've missed it so much!! I want more. Please don't makes us wait so long this time!! :D
    April 11th, 2014 at 02:45pm
  • January Rose

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    This story is amazing!!! I'm only at chapter 5, but I love it so far! This is probably one of the most original pieces of writing I have seen on Mibba, and I wouldn't be surprised if I saw it at Chapters one day with New. York Times Bestseller... written across the front. I have never read anything like this, so I really love it. The plot, setting,characters, etc are very well thought put and I can see the amount of effort you pour into this story.
    I am totally subscribing and recommending because I love this story so much!
    March 25th, 2014 at 01:14am
  • a mimosa pudica

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    I find Alec and Brinley so freaking adorable! This is my favorite part of the story so far! I can't wait to read more!
    March 24th, 2014 at 11:17am
  • Queen of the Clouds

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    Wow, they don't even have birthday cake! Such a simple thing, and you turned it into such a cute scene Cute A tad cliche at the end, like you said, but I feel like it totally worked for Alec.
    ...there’s…um…guys stuff in there to... - should be 'too'
    He finished his question and now it was my turn to lead, my hand still laced in his - you missed the full stop at the end of this sentence. I hope I'm not sounding picky - you just seem to appreciate the tiny mistakes being pointed out, and I know that if it were me I would want to know too XD
    I've also noticed that in this chapter you're capitalising 'he' after dialogue that ends with a question mark, which is unnecessary unless you're starting a new sentence (which doesn't seem to be the case). Treat them the question marks like commas at the end of dialogue Cute
    Can't wait for more! I'm hoping we'll see more of Alec at her house, and I wonder how he's going to sneak out and if anyone will notice he's there? Update soon! Cute
    March 24th, 2014 at 05:25am
  • Vartokk

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    I love everything about this story! And Alec xD
    March 24th, 2014 at 05:15am
  • MissyPrissy

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    I really love your story and I can't wait to see where its going to go. I love the idea that you have created for this story! :) I can't wait to read more.
    March 22nd, 2014 at 12:38am
  • jasper_girl

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    Wow. Such an amazing story. Every detail is brilliant. I feel so sorry for Brinn. Her mother is absolutely horrible. Can't wait to see how this story unravels. Please update soon.
    March 22nd, 2014 at 12:09am
  • Queen of the Clouds

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    I really liked this chapter, especially when she was thinking about why she feels the way she does about her Life Plan. It was good to be grounded for a moment and sort of reassess what had happened so far.
    I still hate her mother Coffee I wonder how she would react if Brin hadn't done it Think
    She woke up with one man and fell asleep with another XD There's such a contrast between the two guys, but it's not super huge or made super obvious - you're writing it so well.
    Nice chapter, update soon! Cute
    March 20th, 2014 at 11:02pm
  • dallahaundra

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    its official i hate her mom
    March 20th, 2014 at 10:19pm
  • Lolita.

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    I feel like Brinn is going to take a real journey. Here she was, sweet and innocent, and everything is so forced on her. Her virginity was hers to give, but she wasn't even allowed to control that.

    I love the contrast between Nathan and Alec. I don't hate either of them because you've created well rounded characters. Nathan is gentle, and soft and a rule follower. He loves Brinn, but I also see this small crack in his facade that's selfish. When they were intimate he was concerned for her, but a part of him was a bit rough and forceful. The forcefulness definitely gave Nathan dimension and showed a contrast to his usual gentle/ programmed nature.

    While Alec isn't so possessive to question her lifestyle or how she breaks rule, but there is something so wild and natural, for lack of a better word. He's careful with her, and he doesn't act as if he's entitled to anything with her, which exhibits the behavior of a real and natural relationship. However, I like that Alec is by nature more of a risk taker, even their kiss is different. The contrast of their appearance was a wonderful tactic on your part. Also, I love how gentle Alec can be with Brinn.

    I know the Alec and Brinn relationship is going to take time to build and I'm so excited to see it build on an emotional level, rather than just adhering to sexual tension alone, like he's and Nathan's does. I feel that she loves Nathan because she has to, but she's not in love with him. In that sense, I feel like all the previous motions she went through with Nathan will be so different with Alec.

    I'm so excited to watch Brinn fall IN love for the first time.

    I hope the Alec/ Brinn relationship doesn't get ruin by premature physical intimacy.

    Wonderful chapter.

    I don't know why, but I feel like there's a Natural insurgence about to happen and Brinn is going to end up being just as forbidden to Alec as he is to her. Alec definitely seems like a leader that doesn't want to accept his amazing potential. Brinn, this prim and proper girl is definitely going to turn into such an unexpected warrior. Anyway's that's just my running theory.

    Update soon!
    March 20th, 2014 at 05:35pm
  • Vartokk

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    Okay so I hate her mother, don't like Nathan, and am completely in love with Alec. He should stay the whole time her parents are gone! :D

    Update soon!
    March 20th, 2014 at 12:31pm
  • Queen of the Clouds

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    Alec is so cute with Brin, so nice and respectful too. I want their happily ever after ending tehe Him giving her the locket was so cute, and I hope she puts the right person's picture in there.
    I would have liked to see a bit more of Brin and Alec interacting before they kissed, as it seemed a tad sudden even though they had been seeing each other for a few weeks by then.
    Wow, I can't believe her mother even gave her a deadline for her virginity Shocked I really dislike her parents XD
    I'm also a tad uncertain about why Brin reacted the way she did to the proposal, when she's been having such doubts about Nathan and arguing with him, and clearly likes Alec Think
    God, I felt so nervous and sorry for her when she was forcing herself to have sex with Nathan. I think you conveyed her emotions really well throughout that scene.
    Nice updates, and I hope you are able to post more soon! Cute
    March 20th, 2014 at 04:53am
  • Lolita.

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    This story is amazing, so divergent meets the handmaids tale. I absolutely love it. I love how you've developed Brin. I really feel like I understand her life without her screaming, POOR ME.

    Well done. I already feel the forbidden love bubbling. The idea is so fresh and new. I really appreciate all the terminology and the history you've created. It's original and fun to read. I love this story and I'm rooting for you!
    March 20th, 2014 at 04:16am
  • Vartokk

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    NO! No no no no no! I wanted Alec to be the one to take it! Not Nathan! I'm upset... Damnnnnnnnit! D:

    Okay, now that I have that out of my system... Update soon please!!
    March 20th, 2014 at 03:44am
  • dallahaundra

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    i like this story !
    March 20th, 2014 at 01:50am
  • Rebell

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    I love this story! I'm totally hooked!
    March 19th, 2014 at 09:51pm
  • Vartokk

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    :O. I'm soooooo excited about Alec! I like him a lot :P. I so wish she had invited him in! But I'm satisfied with the kiss... For now. xD
    March 19th, 2014 at 12:36pm
  • a mimosa pudica

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    The story is beautiful just the way it is! UGH, ALEC AND BRINLEY ALL THE WAY. I'm really looking forward to what will happen after tehe

    I haven't seen it yet but did you post a character up for Nathan? I'd love to see how he looks like!
    March 19th, 2014 at 09:06am