Hospital Beds - Comments

''He sits there, staring down at the hospital bed...thinking. He wants to say something, so do I, but neither of us know what to say.'' That's perfect. The emotion in that line is so obvious, and so true. Stories with self harm are always so off putting, because it's so over used and just used in the wrong way. In this though, it worked - you had the right feel to it, the actual logic of a situation like this.

Bravo. I really, really liked this. Not to mention it had Kellin Quinn in it, who is bae.
Thanks for entering!

Well, excuse me as I mop up my tears from this powerful punch of feels.

THANK YOU.

But on a serious note, this was absolutely amazing. I just-I-I need a moment or five. It was so good, like, beautiful. That ending, though, that ending just smacked me in the face and kicked me in the gut. That letter. The letter. The emotion was so strong and it just hurts. I love it.

This story was an absolute tragedy! I couldn't help but feel bad for Kellin, even though I didn't really understand his pain on a connected level. I can't even imagine what it's like to go through something like that. The ending was so sad too! And that letter was so emotional and the last line was just the cherry on top of the tragic sundae.

General check over for mistakes.
Okay, I love his self awareness and how he can identify that there is the barrier of his self-hatred between them. Your description is lovely, as per usual and I instantly felt bad for him. I love the similes you used too.
This was an absolute sucker punch to the gut with the last paragraph or two. My god. For such a short piece, you generate a great emotional tie to the characters - I have tears in my eyes myself.
Brilliant, brilliant, brilliant.

@ ptvjaime
I WARNED YOU.

ASDFGHJKL YOU. KILLED. MY. BABY. THAT'S IT. I AM GETTING THE SHOVEL.