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  • Tipsy.

    Tipsy. (100)

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    Sorry about the delay Maria, but here I am.
    The layout is so pretty. Absolutely loved it. And needless to say, this is very well written. And five stars to the ending! Actually made me all Sad
    June 1st, 2014 at 12:30pm
  • nearly witches.

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    Layout and Summary

    The summary is nice, hooks the reader in. The GIF at the top of the page can be distracting, but I think it goes well with everything. I absolutely adore the title and subtitle part - it just looks so pretty. The only suggestion I have is that the chapter itself is difficult (or at least difficult for me) to read.

    Content

    This is so sweet, but in a heartbreaking way. Someone already mentioned it below, but you can really get a sense of how deep their feelings for each other were throughout the piece. I love the imagery you've used - all of the withered flowers and voices in the wind, it's simply beautiful.

    Concrit

    I don't think I noticed anything when I was reading this. Good job!
    April 10th, 2014 at 09:16pm
  • CrimsonSlave

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    I really liked this.
    April 3rd, 2014 at 03:59pm
  • TombRaider

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    That was so heartbreaking that I have no words to describe it. The deepness of their feelings brought this piece to a whole new level. Congratz. c:
    April 3rd, 2014 at 03:43pm