Oh, Calamity - Comments

@ Nanook
Ohmygod I'm not meaning to stress you out (/.\) I'll write the next chapter soon though, I swear c:

I just love this story!! Kat and Alex muat be together at the end , i'll die if they're not!! :O <3

Aw. :(
OMG well I just need their cuteness to last, somewhat... I'm going to die if it goes away completely. :((((
But it's your story and I get the feeling you're already set on where you're going with it so I guess I can't do anything to stop you. :(
UGH, you have me stressed out. XD Please update soon. :P

@ Nanook
YOURE SO LUCKY I WANTED TO SEE THEM IN ALABAMA BUT IT WAS TWO HOURS AWAY CAUSE I LIVE IN GEORGIA BUT AHHHH. but as for Kat and Lex, there will be drama. Within the next few chapters and ohmygod the ideas I have for the sequel. I love where its going

OMG I love this.
I had no idea how much I was anticipating the update until I saw that you posted. And then I found myself hesitant to scroll down because I didn't want it to be over!
This is quite lovely. Gaahhhh.... I can't get enough of the Alex cuteness.
If I had to guess who was watching them, it was probably Lisa. She seems like the most predictable suspect. I highly doubt it was Jack because he probably would've been stomping over to them, pissed. But whoever it was THEY BETTER NOT DO ANYTHING to ruin Alex and Katherine's relationship. :( I don't want it to end. :((((
God I'm still reveling in the cuteness, OMG. I just can't right now.
On another note, I SAW ATL THIS PAST WEEKEND. IN BALTIMORE. I GOT A PICTURE WITH RIAN AND HUGGED ALEX. AKJSDAHFLAERGJIORGSRLGLJSFGKSLDL I AM STILL FUCKING DYING. XD
Sorry. XD I just needed that mini freak out.
Anyway, can't wait for more! :DD

Okay. Yay!
I will skip the awkwardness but good job! XD :D

@ Nanook
I edited the ending of the recent chapter, i hope it's a bit better than before. I'll be working on the next chapter soon (:

@ Nanook
i would edit the recent chapter at the end but it might be a while before i get to that. my head was killing me and i could barely think straight haha

Oh, and I nearly forgot! Thanks for the shout-out doll! I appreciate it. :) I am happy that I was your first commenter. :)

Yes, yes, yes!
OMG I love this! :DDD
Sorry for the delay in commenting girl. School has been keeping me busy and I just now got the chance to read them. Loved both updates though! :D
I like this little thing they have going. It's kind of scandelous and I like scandal. :o
But I sort of worry about the fall out. Ehh... Jack won't be too happy. Unless he can see that they truly love each other. :DD That would make it for a happier fall out.
But I guess that's kind of setting the bar a bit high, and not realistic I suppose.
All was good except it kind of jumped at the end of that most recent chapter. You explained that it probably did that because you weren't feeling well and I understand. You just might want to look back on it and edit it a little. Because it was a meaningful moment and it just kind of seemed rushed to me. But maybe that was just me. XD
Anyway, I'm going to get off of the awkward topic now... XD Loved the update! Can't wait for more! :)

@ into your arms .
eeep! thank you so muchhh<3

Lovelovelove this story!! Sorry it's taken me till now to comment but I couldn't help myself this time! Eek! I love Kat with Alex but I don't want her to break Jack's heart since he's such a sweetheart. Gosh my heart is torn! Can't wait for the next chapter!!

@ Nanook
Thank you so much! And I'm happy you like the story (:

Damn! The spacing didn't work! :/ Oh well, you can catch what I meant at that part, hopefully. XD

YES, YES, YAAAAAAAASSSSSS!! I FUCKING LOVE YOU! XD
You actually sort of took my suggestion(s). You made something happen between them.
I love, love, love it. XD I'm just, so excited right now, can you tell? XD
Anyway, on a more serious note... oh my God. I can't believe Katherine's father was the one who caused the accident, and killed her mother. :((( I'm glad that ass won't be around any more to hurt her, but... she lost her mother in the process... :(
But it's nice that Alex is letting her stay with his family, now that she really doesn't have anywhere to go. I thought that was sweet.
My happiness right now over what happened with Alex and Kat though... OMG, it's indescribable.
Can't wait for more!
Oh, and in response to your responses:
I understand, aha, God knows I was pretty bad with my first stories. I can't even believe I wrote some of them the way I did. And then I would do this God awful spacing, like I'd hit return 20 million times between paragraphs

like

this. XD
It was really ridiculous. And I gotcha, I got the feeling that she was messing things up I just didn't think it needed to be done in that graphic of a context. But again, that's just me. But I think other readers would agree to save that stuff for two main characters. XD Or the people you're like, trying to influence us should be together, you know? Because otherwise it's just uncomfortable.
But yeah, I gotcha with Jack. I figured. Ah well. I can understand that. It wouldn't be right if they just broke up right now anyway, since they haven't even been together that long in the story yet.
And that's awesome that's what keeps you motivated! That is what should; your own personal pleasure... I didn't think about that aspect as I was typing the comment, but that should definitely come first! So I can see why you're able to write now. :)
I wish you luck dear. :)

@ Nanook
Oh, and I keep updating because I love seeing the numbers go up for this story. I guess I'm okay with no comments, though they are much appreciated. I think overall though, this is for myself. I'm proud of myself for finally being able to keep up with a fiction I'm writing since the other two kind of... just stopped.

@ Nanook
Thank you so much for the feedback! I know I need to work on my writing, I mean hey. I'm only 17. But thank you for pointing out what. I need to work on. I didn't intend originally for Jack to become Kat's boyfriend but I needed something to make it a little more interesting. Alex and Lisa.. I just wanted some drama in there. I mean you just can't have an Alex fic without Lisa trying to mess things up. Now for the smut written for Alex and Lisa.. well I wasn't going to write a whole scene, but I just kept writing and it kind of just.. happened. I've never exactly written something that graphic before so it was new for me to try. Alex and Katherine. I intentionally made them play it off. Katherine didn't want to deal with it, or really, make it a big deal. She's confused about Alex, whereas Alex does like her and enough to take her advice and leave Lisa (which I was planning from the start) . I have plans for them, but Jack is going to be in the equation for a while . I'm not sure when I'm planning on having Alex and Katherine get together.
Also, I love the idea of Alex comforting Kat, but it might be a bit until- he does considering Jack is also there right now.
Thank you again for commenting and reading<3

Oh, haha, I forgot to mention...
I'll definitely be here to keep reading. I want to know what happens next! <3

Hm, I find it unfortunate that this has yet to receive any comments.
Because the truth is, deary, while there is some improvement that could go into your writing (just minor things: grammar, the way you split up the paragraphs, some details with scenes), this is actually a pretty good story. A lot better than some of the messes I come across as trying to write an ATL or in this case, Alex, fan fiction, that is for damn sure. I mean, you at least get the details right when it comes to ATL, for starters.
Secondly, while I often find it awkward reading stories about ATL in high school (mainly because it's hard to picture, with them being older now and them seeming like they've matured a bit since then), this has actually kept my interest. The only point where I was like, hesitant to stop reading was with the Alex and Lisa scene, which in my opinion was a bit too much, I mean, you could've said that it happened but I don't think it should've been graphic like that. I mean, you perhaps should have saved that with like, Alex and Katherine, and oh God I just feel so awkward talking about this. XD But that's just my opinion, anyway. I definitely don't think it was proper to do it with Alex and Lisa. It just seemed off somehow and I guess I found it awkward because they're together in real life? Idk.
Anyway, pushing past that awkward part I find this frustrating because I just want Alex and Katherine to get together. Don't get me wrong, I love Jack, but he just seems more like a friend to her.
I must also mention I'm commenting because OMG GIRL, the cliffhanger of that last update?! I want to know what happened to her mom. OH MY GOD.
As a suggestion to what I would like to see (you can go with this or not because I remember you said how you wanted this to end, so it may mess it up), but... have Alex comfort Katherine. I don't know... I find it weird he's just holding back on his feelings. Maybe you plan to have him act out on them at some point but it just seems like it's been too long. Like, after they kissed? I found it extremely odd that they both just played it off. But again, that may just be me. I again do not know what your intentions are, so it may be just for them to hold off on how they feel. At one point I was even imagining Katherine barging in when he was pissed at her and just getting him to talk to her, her to kiss him, something! That would have made this something. But at the same time I don't support cheating though, so idk why I was thinking that. Perhaps just because I want them together so badly?
Anyway, this is my honest critique. I was honestly going to wait to give feedback until you got into the story more but I found it sad when I saw that there were no comments. I admire you for updating and having as much as you do with no feedback, unless maybe readers have been messaging you? But if not I guess the subscribers and recommendations have kept you motivated enough to do so. I know personally if I don't get comments I don't feel motivated at all.
So take from this what you will. This is not meant to be mean, but perhaps give you some ideas and perhaps help you out if you choose to go back and edit any of this. Really, you take this like a grain of salt, or not take it at all. It's your choice.
But I hope to have at least made you smile to know that you finally got a comment. :)
-Jenna