May 11th, 2017 at 06:41pm
I feel like letter format always allows for more emotion to be imparted. Perhaps it's the fact that it's a personal thing straight from the narrator and normally, letters aren't intended to be read by people as a story, but it does give this sense of a genuine look into the person's life and how they interact with others. It also gives the chance to be perhaps a little more poetic with description than anybody ordinarily would be when it comes to writing. So for those reasons, I think the format fits this perfectly and just adds so much more to the story than if it was written as a conventional format for fiction.
The content itself is quite nice too, very poetic. It tells the story effortlessly (although like losing control. said, it is a bit unusual that she continually mentions Alex when the letter is to who we're assuming is her significant other) and there's a wonderful flow to the whole thing. You've got some really lovely metaphors throughout, and really unusual ones too. I don't think I've read anything like this before.
This was really nice. Lovely job.
The short paragraph she included about her first love - the one whose mess Christian had to help fix - really brings back to the point of how she struggled before and illuminates just how big of an impact Christian had made on her. However, the later mention of him felt a bit off. Alex made me love him, and then he broke me - this seems like a really, really odd thing to put in a letter that's to the person that they're currently with, talking about the impact they've had on their life and what they helped them move on from. That's really the only thing I spotted in this that read wrong, but even so it doesn't take a lot from the piece and you can still feel the emotion and love that she's conveying regardless.